bewitched #poem #poetry

perhaps I was bewitched by the North Star
or by a ballad as dateless as my blood
geography of feelings populates unwanted interludes
my eyes, the nests of dewy grass and leaves
emerald eyelashes flaunt
black taffeta chirps between my fingers like piano keys
inside my soul your kisses soar
soft lilac tones like prayers of the youngest nun
perhaps because I read your poetry last night
and cut my soul between a stanza and a strife
perhaps a child played with a kite
a kingdom for a sup
maybe it was the wind
that woke me up

Published in the Indian Periodical, March 3, 2019

@short-prose-fiction

image: Irina Alexandrovna, Shutterstock; [link]

 

102 thoughts on “bewitched #poem #poetry

  1. Beautiful, G. I love rereading your work and noticing new things. The use of rhymed couplet at the end with “sup” and “up” not only gives the poem a ‘sonnet’ vibe that fits the subject matter well, and goes along way towards putting a clear conclusion on the poem to make it feel rounded, and it isn’t jarring because there are slant rhymes throughout (leaves/keys, night/strife/kite), but not enough that the rhyme overruns the poem and becomes distracting. Very well executed.

     
    1. David, thank you so much for rereading and for your wonderful analysis. You know it means a lot to me. One thing I am happy with here is that the rhymes do not overrun the poem. I have to give up all rhymes. I am aware of that. Yet it’s harder to create an internal music in a poem without any rhyme. Not impossible at all. It just requires a lot of practice.
      Thank you again for the praise.
      Have a great weekend.
      G.

       
      1. You’re very welcome. I know, and you know the feeling is mutual. I agree it certianly is hard to create that sense of music without rhyme, at least I myself would have to study long and practice a few times before I felt I could make a start at such a thing. Still, I don’t think a little rhyme here and there hurts.

         
  2. Smiling here. A wonderful piece of writing taking us through a narrator’s internal thoughts. The smooth flow added a lyrical quality to the poem and even her uncertainty.
    For me, this had a unique tone, much different from your other writing, but so creative, fresh, and wonderful. Such a pleasure to read this.

     
    1. “creative, fresh, and wonderful” thank you for these wonderful words.
      “For me, this had a unique tone, much different from your other writing” I agree. It is different. The other me ๐Ÿ™‚ Kidding.
      Have a beautiful evening. Must be late there.

       
  3. You’ve literally penned so beautifullyโค๏ธ
    I also write poetries on my blog.
    Would love to see your comments over there๐Ÿ’

     

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