dematerialization #poem #prose poem #short prose

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It was a sort of dematerialization that left behind the scent of orange blossoms and the vague memory of sultry afternoons growing by the margins of the pond: those afternoons in need for seed germination. I am sure you can remember them.

You and your love for me which have always looked for my blood. I told you I am air and therefore I do not have a body. I fill the space in which other bodies manifest themselves.

I am every breath you take in your nights of love when you think you love other women.  Have you ever noticed how blue and humid is the air you breathe between two kisses? That’s me.

Oh, I agree. Sometimes I may look like plum lips and other times like tiny specs of red wine sprinkled on your shirt. Those are the times when the moon is full, and the cicadas’ wings listen to the vibrations coming from the membrane of their own abdomens.

It’s summer: pink roses, fresh lips, quiet balconies.

May I have my black nightgown back? I want to feel its silkiness against my skin.

Oh, you are right.

I do not need it. I do not have a body.

Is it my imagination or your breath just got heavier?

excerpt from my book in progress: Remembrance of Love [working title]

My book, Passions: Love Poems and Other Writings, is available on Amazon here.

The following is an excerpt from a review of Passions: Love Poems and Other Writings written by Fabian Bats. I do not know him. His review is voluntary. Fabian’s words brought tears in my eyes.  I am humbled and deeply honored by his review. His efforts to understand the semiotic of my poetry brought me to my knees.

“The first poem is my favorite in the book; it took a few re-reads to grasp, but when I did, I instantly thought to myself “Genius!”

After my first read, I had no clue what I had just read, “what is the link between the title and the poem?”, I thought, racking my head and moving on to the next poem, hoping for less murky waters to swim in -at the start of the book, it is humorous, I know. However, when I came back to read it again, and started seeing links, I felt butterflies, I marveled at the beauty of the words chosen and how a particular figure of speech was used here or there, and when the stars aligned in my mind, I saw clearly that the author was referring to the night of a honeymoon (it could mean a host of other things to other readers, simply because poetry is art). From this point onward, it was difficult to put the book down.”

You can read the entire review here

Thank you.
Love
Gabriela

@short-prose-fiction (Gabriela Marie Milton)

148 thoughts on “dematerialization #poem #prose poem #short prose

  1. My dear Gabriela, this excerpt was breathtaking. I was carried away by your sublime words…..I always get carried away. You write so beautifully❤❤
    Love and hugs 💐❤🌺

    1. Thank you so much Ishita. You touched my heart hon. I can’t thank you enough for your kindness and your wonderful support. Love and hugs.
      xoxox

  2. Wonderful and very magnificent story!!! 😍 I love so much it!!! ❤️
    Your sublime writings touched my heart so much! 😘 Thank you infinitely for sharing!

    I send you a very big hug full of affection!!! 🤗💕
    With love, Ylenia Ely 😘😘💖💖🌹💐

    1. Thank you. Thank you. Thank you to my beautiful and talented Ylenia Ely.
      Sending you the most beautiful red roses.
      xoxo
      Gabriela

  3. Oh, beautiful Button this is amazing work. It takes us to a divine place where we are exposed to all kinds of beautiful visuals about what love can feel like and how it can materialize. “Those are the times when the moon is full, and the cicadas’ wings listen to the vibrations coming from the membrane of their own abdomens.” Such gorgeous metaphors. Congratulations on such an incredibly review and the beginning of your next book. I can’t wait to add that one to my collection. Have a wonderful and blessed day my dearest. Love J (honeybun)

    1. Hello honeybun,
      I am so sorry I did not reply sooner. Since they have been working to fix my comments the entire situation got worse. Thank you so much for your beautiful comment. I am thrilled you liked this piece.
      ” I can’t wait to add that one to my collection.” You are an angel Joni. Only if I can finish sometimes next January.
      Wishing you a beautiful and blessed weekend sweetheart.
      Love and hugs
      Gabriela

      1. I feel so badly you are having problems, bad timing with everything you have going on. I am getting comments closed for no reason, but not loosing them. Your piece was absolutely brilliant, I loved it. I am so excited you are writing another book. Perhaps soon with your upcoming breather I am hoping you will be inspired to write lots of great new pieces. I write well at the beach though not around others. I hope you have an amazing weekend dearest beautiful Button. Stay safe, blessed and inspired. Love you bunches, yours honeybun 😘🌺❤️🌸

      2. Oh, sweetheart, I am having lots of problems. My feed doesn’t work right, my comments appear and disappear, and my stats are all messed up. And this is a business site. It’s not like I am not paying for this blog,. Anyway,this is going on for two weeks. They told me twice that they fixed everything. Yet it’s getting worse. I am getting tired so I will not do anything anymore till I come back.
        Thank you again for your kind words about this piece. I am really happy you liked it.
        Wishing you a magical evening filled with love and blessings.
        xoxoxox

      3. I know how important this is to everything you are doing. My prayers will include the fixing of this issue for you and others struggling with this. We think it is a traffic issue. I will also pray that God will bless your time away, and that it will be renewing and filled with laughter and great conversations. Take care sweet Button I will miss reading your beautiful poetry but perhaps a break is needed. Great time to work on your new book. Please be safe. I am really excited about your new piece and hoping to see more of this style as I found myself glued to it this morning. Love and hugs my dearest friend. Yours honeybun. 😘🌺🌸❤️🤗

      4. Thank you so much for your prayers sweetheart. Sooner or later those issues will be fixed. “I will also pray that God will bless your time away, and that it will be renewing and filled with laughter and great conversations.” I need this Joni. Rest is important for me now. I really appreciate your sweet words and prayers honeybun. Sending you tones of love.
        Yours
        G (button)
        xoxoxo

    1. Thank you so much Beck. You made my morning. Have a beautiful rest of the day.
      xoxoxo

    1. Thank you so much Timothy. It makes me happy you liked it. Sending good wishes to everyone. I hope you guys have a good day.

    1. I am so humbled by your words Darren. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. I hope everything is well with you. Wishing you a fantastic weekend.

  4. This is a stunningly beautiful poetry Gabriela, Fabian’s words are well deserved though it is hard to describe such haunting beauty it seems not enough, so very well deserved of every glorious adjective , breathtaking dear G.

    1. My dearest Rene. You melted my soul. You are so good to me and so supportive. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. I hope everything is well with you. Be loved. Be inspired. Be happy.
      Sending you hugs and flowers.

  5. What a magnificent & breathtaking excerpt dearest Gabriela….every line of this writing is so beautiful….and the image gives it not just the colors but great depth….divine….your lines….
    ” I told you I am air and therefore I do not have a body” ❤️✨

    1. Aw.. my dearest Navin, thank you from the bottom of my heart. I do have a heart to thank you and to be grateful to you. It really makes me happy you liked this excerpt.
      Sending you lots of love and good wishes for the weekend.
      xoxoxo

    1. Aw… I am so humble and honored by your words. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
      Have a fabulous weekend
      Gabriela
      xoxo

      1. Ellen, thank you again. Please know I enjoy your posts tremendously.

  6. Now this is something I wish I had written. So erotic.

    The review was great and so well deserved!

    And finally: Filippos Drakontaidis

    Born in 1940. His father was a member of the Resistance and was executed in 1944. He studied in the Sorbonne literature and history, later French literature in Athens and sociology in Paris. His first book was Triptych in 1962. He published it under the pen name F. Filippou. He used the same name for some other of his books, while others he published under his real name. Some of his books have been translated in French, Dutch and Slovenian.

    I hope this helps, dear.

    1. Thank you and thank you from the bottom of my heart to my beautiful and talented friend B. I am so grateful to you sweetheart. Glad you liked my piece and thrilled you found him. Actually tones of thanks for finding him.
      It is him who wrote “Quels sentiments combleront jamais l’existence inexistante des hommes de notre temps? [What feelings will ever fill the non-existent existence of the men of our time?] ”
      I am going to check online again but I doubt that there is anything that I can buy online. I’ll see what my European friends can do for me. One of them – you – did a lot.
      Have a beautiful evening and a wonderful weekend.
      να έχεις μια όμορφη βραδιά.

      1. A pleasure, Gab!

        You know, I never read anything by him? Something to rectify as soon as possible. I hope you ll be able to find his work in French. I suppose Amazon won’t be very helpful this time.

        Have a great evening yourself 🙂

      2. I did not read anything by him either. But someone characterized one of my works by using that quote.
        One way or another I am going to find some of his work. Thank you from the bottom of my heart sweetheart.
        xoxoxo

  7. My breath did get heavier and quicker! What a teaser of an excerpt, leaving one thirsting for more!
    Such a wonderful review, Gabriela! You truly deserve it. 🌷❤️😘

    1. Thank you so much Punam. You fill my heart with joy every time you comment. You are such a sweetheart and your appreciation means so much to me. I hope you are ok sweetheart. Sending you plenty of love. Take care of you.
      xoxoxo

      1. Your posts always leave me in awe of your talent. The joy your words fill my heart with, is reflected in the comments I write. I am doing fine, my dear. Thank you so much for your love. Stay blessed. ❤️🌷

      2. Thank you again Punam. You write marvelous poetry. However, there is one style that you employ from time to time and a recurrence of a theme … I think you know what I am talking about. So when you say you are doing fine that makes me really happy. Thank you for your blessings. Sending more your way.
        xoxoxo

    1. Jay, I can become a reductionist and use less 🙂 That you for the comment my fiend. I hope you are ok.

  8. This is beautiful, so utterly beautiful, raw, passionate and heartfelt. I feel as though I am not using the right words to describe this because this is so much more than that. You take the reader with you on this journey, and it feels like a spiritual enlightening.

    I can always imagine the imagery in your poetry and it’s breathtaking. I say this especially since I do not really visualize others’ imagery in their literary pieces that well, but your poetry is fascinating for my mind’s eye. You never fail to move me with your words; you traverse the reader and make them understand the meaning, especially with a piece like this, behind emotional prose and striking imagery.

    I am stunned, in awe, and I admire your poetic abilities to create a captivating story through beautiful prose and words that touch the soul, the heart, and the mind.

    In summary, I enjoyed reading this piece. It is immersing, the lines rhythmic and haunting with the feeling of a ghost as the narrator: lingering, but leaving a profound long-lasting effect.

    Brilliant piece. ❤️❤️❤️

    1. My dearest Lucy,
      I have no words to tell you how moved and humbled I am by your comment. You brought tears in my eyes. Nothing give me more joy than words like these “You never fail to move me with your words; you traverse the reader and make them understand the meaning,” Lucy, I write from my heart trying to connect with my readers’ hearts. If I can do that I feel honored, humbled, and victorious at the same time. My goal here is communication, the transcendence of the wooden language, the creation of an archetypal imagery and journey into ourselves, and the transmission of feelings in a way that can touch lots of readers. In truth I’ve never wanted accolades. All I want is to touch my readers’ hearts; to breath in the same rhythm with my reader. This is what makes me happy as a writer.
      Again, thank you from the bottom of my heart for taking the time to write such a marvelous comment. You made me happy.
      Have a lovely weekend sweetheart.
      xoxo
      Gabriela

    1. Do you mean G is working on E? I’m kidding. Thank you for your comment Eric. I am glad you did not start like Sam 🙂
      How was your tea time today?

      1. When isn’t G working on E – says he with tongue in cheek – Ah, Sam, he’s got his hands full with Erin, in a literary sense that is – and don’t forget there’s also, Amy with designs on him. Tea – a working cuppa today as trying to get more words out of Erin – she doesn’t give them easy…

      2. “and don’t forget there’s also, Amy with designs on him.” Yeah, it’s complicated.
        “a working cuppa today as trying to get more words out of Erin – she doesn’t give them easy…” You could buy her flowers. It may work 🙂

  9. G, I always fall in love with your writing, but this…. more than ever. It is surreal and mysterious, but still hints at love and passion and of one who pervades everything… one who yearns and who is yearned for, a memory, someone who has gone, perhaps dead… I am left longing for more. This has me spellbound and has given me chills. Certainly, it is magnificent ❤️🌸🥀☀️💝💝 xoxo

    1. My beautiful and fabulous Rachel,
      You know that I always fall in love with your writings too. And you know on which shore I want to be now. And you know to whom I want to talk right now.
      I am so glad you are here Rachel. I hope everything is ok with you. Thinking about you and sending you plenty of love.
      My piece.. thank you so much for your beautiful words.
      “surreal and mysterious, but still hints at love and passion and of one who pervades everything.” I love your interpretation Rachel but I don’t want to give you chills. I want you to be happy. I am sending you plenty of sunshine, warmth, sage in bloom, and red roses.
      What else can I send you sweetheart?

      1. Aww sweet friend… how I would love to talk to you and frequent the shore with you. It is cold now though, perhaps we could choose somewhere warmer? It must be nearly vacation time for you, how wonderful!
        What else can you send me?? Well, a note with your words on it would be fantastic. What can I send you?
        Love and hugs are a given, of course xoxox

      2. What about if we wear fur coats? Will that help? However, if you want to go somewhere else you know we can go to Tahiti or Hawaii. Wherever you want my fabulous Rachel.
        “it must be nearly vacation time for you, how wonderful!” Yes, almost there. I am starting to get ready.
        “Well, a note with your words on it would be fantastic” I’ll write to you soon. I promise you a beautiful note.
        “What can I send you?” Your love.
        Sending you the Northern Star. I am waiting for you the send me the Southern cross. Let’s change their place in the sky! Let’s play with them, Rachel.
        Love and hugs to you.
        xoxoxo

  10. “the vague memory of sultry afternoons growing by the margins of the pond” …oh I want to be there. Just so exquisitely written, tickles all your senses and haunts the way only someone worthy can.

    1. Thank you so much for such beautiful words. I am really humbled and delighted.
      Love and Hugs
      G.

  11. Loved the review. One has to read your work many times to understand exactly what you want us readers to know in connection with the title.
    This prose here is amazing. 😍

    1. Sweetheart, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. I am so glad you like this excerpt.
      Have a great weekend.
      xoxox0

    1. You are showering me with compliments. Thank you so much. I am so grateful to you.
      xoxoxo

  12. Another masterfully written piece from you, Gabriela. You took me away as you always do. As for that first poem in your book, I’m still struggling with it. I’ll get it. I know. (smile) Sending much love to you!!! xo

    1. Aw… my wonderful Amy. Thank you. Thank you. Thank you. You bring plenty of joy in my life.
      “As for that first poem in your book, I’m still struggling with it. I’ll get it. I know.” Let me know when you do 🙂
      Have a fabulous weekend filled with scents of summer.
      Love and hugs to you.
      xoxo

      1. You are so welcome, Gabriela. I’m going to again try to figure out that poem. You’ve got me twisted in knots inside my head. LOL
        I am having a fab weekend, thank you! Wishing you the very same. My lilacs and peonies are blooming …. what a delight!!
        Love and hugs right back at you! xo

      2. Oh, how beautiful: liliacs and peonies. Enjoy every minute Enjoy every scent. Feel the love. It nurtured us 🤗💕🌸❤️💝🌷

    1. My Dearest Irina,
      Thank you so much for your beautiful comment. It means a lot to me.
      Enjoy your weekend too sweetheart.
      xoxo

    1. Thank you so much Diana for your wonderful comment and for the congrats. I am so happy you like the excerpt. You brighten my day with your beautiful words.
      Wishing you a fabulous weekend.
      xoxo

    1. Thank you so much. You are a sweetheart. I am glad you liked the picture too.
      Sending you love and good wishes. Enjoy the rest of your weekend.

    1. Gina, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. I am humbled by your words. Sending you plenty of love. Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
      xoxoxo

    1. Ay… thank you so much Shantanu. I am really glad you like it. Wishing you a great weekend my friend 🌸🤗

  13. I am every breath you take in your nights of love when you think you love other women. Have you ever noticed how blue and humid is the air you breathe between two kisses? That’s me.

    I don’t know what else to say except that I saved this article and exclaimed when I read the above stanza. This whole excerpt is beautiful. You write so well.

    1. My dearest Kendi. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the praise. You made my evening sweetheart.
      Love and hugs to you 🌹

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