He #flash fiction #short prose #manuscript excerpt #love

He acted like what he was: one of the most handsome and wealthiest bankers of the city.

Nightly candlelight parties in his villa whose balconies opened toward the ocean. Château Mouton Rothschild Pauillac: deep reds and an unmistakable taste of eucalyptus. Coquilles Saint-Jacques, escargots, Provencal fish stew whose aroma imbibed the corridors from lazy late afternoons until early mornings when it was replaced by that of coffee and freshly baked croissants.

It was an act. He looked like a man who while sleeping with one woman thought of another. Teeth planted in warm lips in an eerie absentness of mind; nothing less than automatism. His entire being was consumed by something else, something as imperative as the birth of a child: the naked vision of a woman whom he could not have.

excerpt from my manuscript Remembrance of Love (working title)

My poetry collection Passions: Love Poems and Other Writings is available on Amazon here .
Passions featured in San Francisco Book Review
Passions featured in Manhattan Book Review.

@short-prose-fiction (Gabriela Marie Milton)

86 thoughts on “He #flash fiction #short prose #manuscript excerpt #love

  1. Mesmerizing, my dear. This is such beautiful and poignant prose. You can feel the crushing realization of the man—he is not satisfied with his life. Something, as how he feels, is missing and he longs for that. This is so visceral to me, and the way the story comes to life… It’s truly remarkable. Another excellent piece, G. I enjoyed reading. 💖

    1. Thank you so much my dearest Lucy. I am so happy you liked the piece and very grateful for your support. Have a magnificent weekend.
      Love
      Gabriela

  2. Wow. An x-ray on the deepest of levels. This is so powerful and made me very sad for him. I wanted to know what happens to him! Truly well done!!! And I must tell You, lovely Gabriela, as per usual before coming here I stopped by Your book to read some of Your wonderful poems. ‘I want to die alone’ blew my mind. SOOOOO crazy beautiful!!! I hope You are having a weekend that gifts You much to smile about!!! Sending HUGE hugs and gently swaying trees heavily laden with otherworldy Spanish moss Your way! (one of my favorite things and that’s what I see outside of our window right now!) 😄🤗❤️😊💕!

    1. My dearest Katy, thank you so much for your exquisite love and appreciation. I am gratefulfor your support.
      “I wanted to know what happens to him.” You will know what happens to him.

      Thank you again for buying and reading my book. It means a lot to me. Recently my publisher is fighting Amazon trolls who rated my book one star without saying why it deserves one star.
      I want to die alone.. Kathy it feels to me like I wrote that piece yesterday. I am so glad you liked it.
      “Sending HUGE hugs and gently swaying trees heavily laden with otherworldy Spanish moss Your way” Oh, that is splendid. Thank You very much. Sending you the fresh air of a Saturday morning by the sea. May You be love today and every day.
      xoxoxoxo
      G.

      1. Ah!!! I’m excited there will be more about him/his journey! And reading anything You write is always absolutely my pleasure, dear Gabriela!!!

        So odd about the trolls. There are some people out there with too much time on their hands and very odd ways of making it pass. Sigh. I’m sorry that’s happening and hope Your publisher is able to get to the bottom of it. Your work is crazy gorgeous though, and if it’s any consolation….when I’m buy shoes that NEED to be comfortable, etc., I pay HUGE attention to star ratings. When it comes to art forms of all expression…..I tend to follow what I’m drawn to as art is SOOOO personal and completely subjective. Anyone who is of a poetic/artistic spirit will find Your book, regardless of such silliness. However, may whatever angels/muses rally around art swiftly untangle that mess and set it to drifting away, away, away! 😃

        So happy You liked the islandy wishes!!! Yay! And Thank You! May You be love today and every day as well. That’s so very sweet!!! ❤️❤️❤️

      2. Hi Katy. I am happy you liked the piece. Thank you for your kind words, praise and good wishes. You are such a doll: beautiful, talented, full of love and enthusiasm.

        “when I’m buy shoes that NEED to be comfortable, etc., I pay HUGE attention to star ratings. ” It seems like a great idea. When I WAS buying shoes I was paying attention only to how high the heels were 🙂 I am 5.3. I need high heels 🙂 I did not care about comfort. Several years ago I sprained my right ankle. It was a bad injury. Since then I NEED my shoes to be comfortable. I made the transition from high heels to comfortable kicking and screaming so to speak 🙂 I still wear high heels but it’s not what it used to be.

        “I tend to follow what I’m drawn to as art is SOOOO personal and completely subjective” I agree with you Katy. I am the same. Thank you again for your kind words.

        I loved the islandy wishes! I listen to their whisper every time I feel down. They are lovely.
        I can’t send you islandy wishes but I do send you the most beautiful thrill of a red canary. It was a glorious morning here.
        Love and hugs
        G.

      3. My absolute pleasure, beautiful Gabriela!

        Laughing much at Your shoe segment. You’re one of those women I bow to as I have never, no matter how much I practice, been good at truly high heels. It’s comical! I wear them (4″ MAX!) on date night sometimes when we walk very little 🤣. I bet even though Yours are shorter these days, that they rock and You rock them!!!

        I’m so happy You like the islandy wishes AND WOW!!! I have never been sent the thrill of a red canary! What a sweet, wonderful gift! Just magical!!! I’m so happy You had a magical morning….I hope it went on and on and….
        Sending Much Love and Huge hugs right back!!! 🤗❤️🌸💕😊

      4. Katy, my dear I am glad I made you smile. Thank you for your wonderful reply.
        “I wear them (4″ MAX!) on date night sometimes when we walk very little” That’s the trick isn’t it? 🙂
        “Yours are shorter these days, that they rock and You rock them!!!” I rock them but they rock my right ankle too 🙂
        “I’m so happy You like the islandy wishes AND WOW!!! ” I loved them. Everything that is islandy enchants my senses. My dream is to retire on an island; a tropical one if possible.
        katy, I am glad you liked the thrill of the canary. It makes me very happy.
        LOVE ans HUGS. HUGE HUGS.
        G.

      5. Awww! Sending Your right ankle much love! And right?!!! Fiji. A little retirement home on the water in Fiji would be A Okay with us!!! 🤣 It’s not asking much! And in keeping with Your lovely bird bestowment and our islandy dreams, I send 3 happily chatting and merrily flying toucans Your way to ferry You along through the rest of the week!!! Huge hugs and so much Love!!! 🤗❤️🐬🦜💕😊🌊

      6. “I send 3 happily chatting and merrily flying toucans Your way to ferry You along through the rest of the week!!! ” Thank you so much Katy. My rest of the week will be splendid.
        ” A little retirement home on the water in Fiji would be A Okay with us!!!” That will be perfect. And I won’t even need high heels anymore 🙂 I can walk barefoot.
        Love and hugs to my beautiful and talented Katy.
        xoxoxo…

    1. Hello my dearest Cindy, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. You made my morning 🙂
      May the rest of your day be fabulous.
      xoxo
      G.

  3. Beautifully captured…the man within the man lost in the man…the thought that no one thought was so profound…the absent-mindedness of kisses without feeling…I wonder what becomes of him…
    Lovely, quite lovely, Gabriela,
    Greetings from Spain,
    F.

  4. “something as imperative as the birth of a child: the naked vision of a woman whom he could not have.”

    That is – terrific. And it’s so interesting that you write “naked vision of a woman” instead of “vision of a naked woman” – beautiful

    1. Thank you so much Diana. Plenty of obsessions 🙂 Your good wishes mean so much to me.
      Have a beautiful Sunday.

    1. B. thank you so much. It means a lot to me you liked it. I hope everything is well with you ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

  5. “His entire being was consumed by something else, something as imperative as the birth of a child: the naked vision of a woman whom he could not have.”….I’m quite mesmerized with these lines….don’t know how many times I must’ve read them….the story of an empty man, who looked wealthy from outside….”the naked vision of a woman”….how beautiful & deep ✨❤️

    1. Good afternoon (it’s afternoon where you are) my dearest Navin, and thank you for your comment. Did I call you darling once? I am going to call you sweetheart this time 🙂 Your support is precious.
      Wishing you a marvelous Sunday evening.
      G.

      1. Good evening dearest Gabriela…you can call me whatever you wish to…I’m your mirror…I’ll be the reflection of your feelings…good or bad…doesn’t matter…but I’ll be there… always for you…you’re a darling…you’re my sweetheart…you’re divine…you’re the universe…covered in curvy curves of formless form…I’m blessed to have your support, dearest G…Much love

      2. Aw… this is so sweet and so poetic. You left me speechless my dearest Navin. Am I a darling? Most people will characterize me as being a “cool customer” 🙂
        “but I’ll be there… always for you” Thank you SO much Navin. Your words melted my heart. I will always be here for you too. Please know that.
        Let’s see: the sage and the myrtle trees are still in bloom in front of my house. May their beauty and their perfume travel the ocean and reach you this evening.
        Much love and plenty of hugs
        Yours
        G.

    1. Hello Bo. Thank you so much for being here. Bo, lots of followers do not see my posts in their readers. The WP’s answer: it is happening because I use a VPN. Ok…
      Anyway, I do not see your posts in my readers either and I do not receive notifications when you post. I go to your side to see if you posted. If I leave a comment I have no idea if you replied. I have to go to your side and check again. It’s not only you. On the same list with you are: Basilike, Eric, Rachel, Watt and I can continue…The WP’s answer: It’s happening because of my VPN. Ok..
      Anyway, you said we could continue a certain discussion via email. I sent you my email but I have no idea if you received it. Please let me know.
      I hope you are doing much better
      Hugs
      G.

      1. What’s VPN? I was told if sb doesn’t see me, they should delete cookies, empty cache, and open private blogs in a new window instead of a new tab. And possibly change a browser, supposedly Chrome is best compatible with WP, though I use Firefox myself, so….Don’t know. It’s weird at times.

      2. VPN – A virtual private network extends a private network across a public network and enables users to send and receive data across shared or public networks as if their computing devices were directly connected to the private network. Basically it hides you computer IP and encrypts your data while it “travels” via servers. If you send anything via your computer and if you do not have a VPN the recipient (and not only) has access to your computer IP and he/she can easily detect your location. THE VPN assigns a virtual IP to your computer. Almost nobody (governments can require access to VPN data for the purpose of national security) can tell where you are in this world. I can make it look the way I want. One day I can appear in Germany. The next day I can appear in Japan (my IP computer will be showing Germany, Japan, however…). I usually keep it in the US. It does not make any difference. My real IP cannot be seen.

        I have my laptop covered by the university’s VPN. We are not allowed to send emails, data, or anything else without the VPN. If hackers intercept our data during transmission they end up with a bunch of nonsense because the data is heavily encoded.

        As for my private laptop I was hacked a while ago when I traveled to a conference in Europe. It created plenty of problems for me. Actually it was a nightmare. Since then I go via a VPN which I pay for.

        Recently one of my WP followers contacted me. He threatened to expose my computer IP and let everyone know where I am. I did not reply. I wish him good luck with that. Unless he works for the CIA or FIB I doubt he can do it. And even so he needs a very good reason to get a hold of my data.

        Back to the issue we were discussing: the VPN “slows” the working of your computer because of the encryption and the virtual IPs that are assigned to your computer. You cannot see that but it is happening. Therefore the working of some commercial apps may be affected. My WP site is affected. It’s slow and my posts sometimes get in my followers readers sometimes they do not. However, I do not understand why I cannot see the posts of the same readers. I follow myself too. Until two months ago I was able to see my posts in my own reader. Now I cannot see them anymore. Every time I tell WP that they send me a link of my posts in my own reader. Well, actually those posts never appear in my reader. I don’t understand why, but I suspect very few people do.
        I use Chrome too. So that’s not a problem. My settings automatically delete any cookies..etc… that is not to say that some cookies cannot penetrate. Some can but very few.
        Sending love. I hope you can let me know how you feel soon.
        Gab.

      3. Got it.
        Don’t know either. I sometimes don’t see my followers either, then I see them again without doing anything so…It’s them, not us.

        As for my leg, I can lean on it some without that much pain but the stiffness doesn’t go away. It will take a while.

    1. Thank you so much Rekha. It means a lot to me you liked it.
      Peace and blessings to you sweetheart.
      Stay safe.
      Gabriela

  6. I was pulled in immediately, Gabriela. Can’t explain it but I had an instant dislike for this man. He appeared to me to be spoiled, ruthless, dominating, and determined to have any woman he wanted especially someone who evaded his advances. Thus the obsession. That’s my take on this tale. Of course I want to find out how this tale unfolds. Excellent write! xo

    1. “I was pulled in immediately, Gabriela….Excellent write! ” Thank you so much Amy. You made my afternoon.
      ” Of course I want to find out how this tale unfolds.” Amy, you are so kind but only if I can finish this book. Two years ago I said I would be ready in two years. Now I am saying I will be ready in three years. That’s the way my novel goes 🙂
      Anyway, sending plenty of love and thanks for your comment and your interpretation. Both mean a lot to me.
      Stay safe and happy Amy.
      Love
      Gabriela

      1. You just can’t force writing, Gabriela. At least that is my experience. There are times I write something and my heart says no. Other times I cannot it seems keep up with the words that are pouring forth so fast. Then there are those times what I write gets trashed. Ah, those words can be fickle at times. So glad I made your afternoon. Any kind of upliftment or smiles I consider sheer Gifts these days.
        Doing my best to be happy, my friend. We just lost one of our fur babies which is very tough. The tears do come yes yet just as in today I could speak about Cookie with a smile already on my face. My choice is happy even with a breaking heart. Much love to you!! xo

      2. Amy, you really made my afternoon beautiful. Thank you again.
        “There are times I write something and my heart says no. Other times I cannot it seems keep up with the words that are pouring forth so fast. Then there are those times what I write gets trashed. Ah, those words can be fickle at times.” I agree with you Amy.
        However, for now I don’t have that problem. My problem is that I do not have time at all. I have other commitments, teaching, research to publish, and the list can continue. My literary endeavors always come last. That’s life.
        It’s evening here. I put 14 hours of work today and I am not ready yet. I am just taking a break to reply to comments on my blog.

        “Doing my best to be happy, my friend. We just lost one of our fur babies which is very tough. The tears do come yes yet just as in today I could speak about Cookie with a smile already on my face. My choice is happy even with a breaking heart. Much love to you!!”

        Amy, I am so sorry to hear about this. My deepest sympathy. I know how hard it is. Two years ago I lost one of my kitties, Monsieur Bombon. It was very hard. Still is. Now my other kitty – Maya – is alone. I should say lonely. Much love to you too Amy.
        Sending you PLENTY OF LOVE!!!!!!
        G.

  7. This is so beautiful, Button. You can smell the food and sense the tension. Very intriguing I love it. There are people who always want what they can’t have and forget to be grateful for what they do have. I once had a female friend for a short while like this man you describe, only she treated men this way. You can feel the pain it is to be touched when you know someone is not really there. Your description is so gorgeous as always. Your writing is such a joy to read. Hope all is well my friend. Hugs and sending you lots of love. The Monarchs we have been hatching here will be touching down in your yard all at the same time to bid you a beautiful day with their lovely orange-red and black wings on their way to Mexico. Take the best of care, Love (J) honeybun

    1. My dearest honeybun.
      First, my deepest apologies for my late answer. I also apologize I did not comment yet on your new posts. I will get to your site soon.
      Second, thank you very much for your kind words and for sharing the story of your female friend. We all can learn.
      I am very glad you liked the excerpt. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your love and hugs. They are very precious to me.
      “The Monarchs we have been hatching here will be touching down in your yard all at the same time to bid you a beautiful day with their lovely orange-red and black wings on their way to Mexico.” Gorgeous.
      Honeybun, I hope you are having an evening filled with love and beauty.
      Blessing sweetheart and talk to you soon.
      G(Button)

  8. Please don’t apologize Button. I can’t imagine how busy you are with all that you have going on. I know you will read what you can when you have time. Your work is magnificent and I will be excited to read your book when it is finished. Sending you love and hugs my dear friend. ❤️💕love Honeybun

      1. I don’t know why I am just seeing this comment now along with one 18 hours old. However I am just grateful to receive it. You have been such a blessing in my life dear Button as I am sure you are to your students. Your encouragement and loving support has been a beautiful part of my on line existence. I will always feel blessed by your kindness as well and of course your breathtaking work. Your writing is a gift to everyone that reads it.

        Sending you love ❤️ and many hugs. Flowers are on there way as well, picked from all the places you love the most. Wildflowers of course are the most lovely so they will stay fresh for weeks. Love honeybun 🤗💕❤️😘

      2. My dearest honeybun, I do not know what is going on with the comments either. I am happy I received yours as you are happy you received mine. Thank you for your kind words and please know I value your friendship and I love your beautiful work too.
        The flowers just got here. They are splendid. Thank you!
        Sending you plenty of love and hugs.
        G (Button)

      3. Hi my dearest beautiful Button. I am not getting all my comments in the reader section under comments. Some of my comments are under (all) in the reader. I know what a kind and generous soul you are and that you treasure our friendship as do I. As busy as you are, you still find time to read my work which is such a blessing to me. Your work is also a blessing. I love your amazing gift. Thank you for the kind message. I too am sending more love, hugs and more flowers as we never have too many. Love you Button. Yours, honeybun

      4. Thank you Joni. I just saw this comment. Do not worry about anything. Just write and be happy.
        Love you
        G.

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