Destined to replace #poem #poetic prose #short prose

I could detect the taste of the city on your lips.

The city and her languorous afternoon we spent in bed.

Every evening at 6 pm the chords of your guitar used to grow rose buds.

Sheer sunsets imprinted on our bodies.

Streets, labyrinths of gray cobblestones, dying in the orange light only to be revived later in the night by the steps of lovers desperately calling each other like song sparrows, brown streaks through each eye.

You said if I leave, I would become a stranger to the city. Did you mean to your lips?

I looked at the clock. Its hands showed no time. I answered:

How interesting. Strangers are always destined to replace.

By the little colored stall where ice cream was sold in the summer your guitar shed its notes: rose petals in the remnants of a cold wind.

excerpt from my book in progress: Remembrance of Love [working title]

 

My poetry collection, Passions: Love Poems and Other Writings, is available on Amazon here.
Thank you.
Love.
Gabriela

@short- prose-fiction (Gabriela Marie Milton)

image: agsandrew; Shuterstock; [link]

133 thoughts on “Destined to replace #poem #poetic prose #short prose

  1. Absolutely fascinating and magnificent poem, I’m totally fascinated!!! 😍😍😍 I love so much your poems!!! ❤️❤️❤️
    This poem touched my heart so much!!! 😍
    I send you a very big hug full of affection and much love!!! 😘❤️❤️🌹🌹🌹💖💖🤗🤗🤗

    1. My dearest Ely, you are so sweet. Thank you so much for your beautiful comment. Sending you plenty of hugs and love. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday.
      xoxo
      Gabriela

      1. Thank you again. It’s always a pleasure to read yours 🌹💕🙏

    1. Thank you so much my dearest Ingrid. I hope everything is well with you. Sending hugs to everyone.

  2. Dearest beautiful Button I have been waiting and hoping to see another excerpt from your book in progress, what a treasure to wake up and see this gorgeous new poem first thing.

    “Your guitar used to grow rose buds – Dying in the orange light only to be revived later in the night – Its hands showed no time”. What wondrous words, metaphors and visuals you paint before us in this world you create.

    In the end as we sense the sadness or doubt that settles in her mind, as she begins to wonder if the love is real.

    An exquisite ending “rose petals in the remnants of a cold wind”

    Button this is now one of my favorites. Your words have moved my heart and soul. Truly captivating work.

    Thank you for sharing poems from your book in progress, it is such a gift. Have a blessed and lovely Sabbath my friend. Love to you, honeybun ❤️💕🤗🌸🌺

    1. Good morning my dearest honeybun and thank you for your marvelous comment. You left me breathless. The sun is shining and your words make me feel like I should float in the sky.
      Thank you for your love.
      Thank you for taking the time to write such a beautiful comment.
      Thank you for being you.
      Sending you lots of love and blessings. May the magic of this Sunday inspire you.
      Love
      G(Button)

      1. My pleasure dear Button. Wouldn’t it be marvelous if we could fly. We could meet for lunch somewhere over a beautiful oak. I wish I could still dream of flying like I did as a child. I am inspired after reading your work. I got your love and blessings too. You have a truly amazing day my friend. Lots of happiness coming your way. ❤️💕🌸🌺 love honeybun

      2. Oh, it will be lovely if we could fly. If we could have wings. I love helicopters so I can settle for one. What would you like for lunch?
        It makes me happy that I inspired you Joni. Thank you for saying that.
        Love you
        G.

      3. You definitely inspire me Button, which is a blessing for me. Have a beautiful day dear friend. For lunch I would fly a basket with goat cheese, lots of it too, fresh baked rosemary and garlic French bread, grapes, strawberries, and a small bottle of Chilean wine. Of course there would be a flourless chocolate cake. Also I would ask you to read my favorite poems from “Passions.” A lovely lunch with a wonderful friend. Have a blessed day Button. Love honeybun. 🌺🌸🤗❤️💕 I am heading out now to fly around and glaze at God’s wonders.

      4. What a great lunch. We will keep the Chilean and we’ll add a Malbec from Argentina. I hope that chocolate cake is BIG… I got to stop eating sweets 🙂 What about reading one of your beautiful poems too? I would love to do that.

    1. Aw.. I am humbled and honored by your words. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
      Sending love
      Gabriela

    1. Thank you so much my dearest Punam. You bring so much love in my life. It looks like I am going to have a good Sunday. I hope your Sunday was good too- not over yet.
      Sending you love and fresh flowers.
      Take good care of yourself sweetheart.

      1. I am glad to hear that. Sending more love and flowers ❤️🌹❤️🌹

    1. If you are talking about the painting that is not my work. There is proper attribution at the end of the blog. You can check that link.

      1. I am so sorry to hear Bo. Keeping my fingers crossed and please keep my posted. love to everyone.
        xoxo

      1. I am glad to hear that your Sunday is going well. Mine is going well too 🙂

    1. Eric, thank you so much. I know you. You are more enigmatic than my lines. I thought I told you that before.

    1. Hi Shanyu, thank you from the bottom of my heart. Such a joy to hear from you. I hope you are well my dear friend.

      1. You are so welcome G. It a joy to hear from you too. I am doing very well and I hope you are too. I wanted to tell you how absolutely resounding your works in the book are. I got a chance to read some of them and you have me swooned!

      2. Aw… that is so sweet of you to say. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Sending you a rose and a hug.
        I am really glad you are well.

      3. Doing my part in making others smile if only by words it is. Just got your rose and it smells of love and peace. I hope you find it too.
        Please take care.

    1. Thank you so much Rene. I am glad you enjoyed the read. Sending love and please stay safe.
      xoxo

    1. My Dearest Katy,
      Thank you so much for your beautiful words. You made my evening more beautiful.
      xoxo

  3. Good evening G,

    a beautiful excerpt to tease our imaginations.

    Loved the line: “You said if I leave, I would become a stranger to the city. Did you mean to your lips?” Really made me smile. The line enriches the piece It was a flirtatious interplay between lovers that provokes delight.

    Your gorgeous, description of the streets at sunset was beautiful. As I have said so many times before, it is your wonderful talent for bringing everything to life that makes your prose and poetry so real, hence vivid and lifelike.

    You are a master of the craft. (The writing craft, not witchcraft, although I must admit your writing is spellbinding.)

    Wonderful excerpt.

    1. Good evening Drew.
      You probably are resting. Perhaps you are even asleep now. I am awake. That gives me a certain freedom; a certain advantage over you. I am joking 🙂
      Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your magnificent comment.
      “Your gorgeous, description of the streets at sunset was beautiful.” Thank you. Thank you. I learned how to describe sunsets from a very dear friend of mine who used to spend months at the time in a tropical isle 🙂
      You are a master of the craft. (The writing craft, not witchcraft, although I must admit your writing is spellbinding.) Thank you. I am humble you think I am a master of the writing craft. “The writing craft, not witchcraft.” Well, how do you know that I am not a master of the witchcraft too? 🙂 Kidding…
      Thank you for everything Drew. Thank you for your kind and generous support and comments.
      May your tomorrow be fabulous. May the muse be with you.
      G.

      1. Smiling. Yes, you must have caught me at the precise moment I went to bed. These up at dawn workouts send me to sleep early.

        It was my pleasure leaving my little imprint here on your gorgeous excerpt. With you, a street, a cloud, a balloon, all breathe life.
        each one plays a small part in your writing. You take nothing for granted; it’s alomst as if the world is your manuscript and the rest of us mortals, nouns, and objects are just props.

        Witchcraft……smiling. I wouldn’t be surprised.

        Have a gorgeous day. I hope it is full of smiles and inspiration.

      2. Drew, thank you for your beautiful reply. It means so much to me.
        “you take nothing for granted; it’s alomst as if the world is your manuscript and the rest of us mortals, nouns, and objects are just props.” Oh, Drew, I don’t know what to say. You are so kind. You took my breath away and humbled me beyond words.
        “Witchcraft……smiling. I wouldn’t be surprised.” 🙂 I think I need to learn the craft since the most googled sentence today was “TikTok witches hex the moon.” …

        I hope you had a beautiful evening walk. I hope you feel well. I wish you a restful night. May the whisper of love be with you. May love be with you.
        Thank you once again.
        G.

  4. Amazing & so romantic poem….”Every evening at 6 pm the chords of your guitar used to grow rose buds.”….the imagery os astounding….the strangers….the city vibe….the romance….the sensuality….the depth….oh, I’m simply losing my breath….by simply visualizing this air ✨❤️

    1. My dearest Navin,
      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. Every words you write is so dear to me. I can’t tell you how much joy you bring.

      Navin, your site may function properly now but something is wrong with mine. It started about two months ago when I had a chat with WP because I din’t get all notifications and despite the fact that I follow myself my posts stopped appearing in my reader. I chated with them on several occasions. They started working on my site and told me that everything was fixed.
      Well….
      1. I still don’t get all notifications.
      2. I still don’t see my own posts appearing in my reader and on top if I go to some .com I cannot comment or like any posts because they ask me to log in. Your site is in that category. That did not happened before WP “fixed” my site.

      Now: I get notifications that you posted by email, but I cannot like or comment on your posts, so could you please do me a favor? Could you like some of my future posts? I will try to click on your site from mine to see if it works. If you only comment it does not work. This is how I operate these days with some .com (s) It is what it is and I am tired of spending hours with WP and trying to explain myself over and over.

      Let’s see if it works like this. If not I will have to open another chat with WP.
      Sending you plenty of love my dear friend and thank you for everything.
      xoxo
      G.

      1. Oh my dearest Gabriela,

        I know exactly how you feel when you write to WP. There has been a period, where I was sending 2 mails a day. I have email correspondence saved from the time I migrated my site till last week, where I gave up on the “solutions & fixes” by WP happiness (/crappiness) engineer. I was frustrated quite a lot as they kept saying they’ve resolved the issue but they didn’t even touch it properly. Unfortunately, WP is very selective & can only help with small issues. I don’t contact them anymore as their amateur reply bring the frustration.

        I asked DebbySEO (search her by this name on WP), who provides search engine optimization services to have a look at my issue. She spent quite a lot of time on contacting WP as well. In the end, we agreed upon a work around that people should subscribe to my site by entering their email. Then I found another way, where I click on People ->Followers -> then I delete 10 followers a day & invite them to rejoin my blog. You did accept my invitation from there 🙏. But it’s a risky thing to do coz not everyone is going to accept the invitation ; some sites/blogs don’t exist anymore & some don’t care or can’t recall. But I would rather have the active followers than those who simply follow my blog for the sake of traffic/following. So I don’t mind. 20 genuine readers are better than 200, who don’t even care or have time to read.

        I do receive notification of your posts but I’m in doubt if you receive mine. I will like some of your posts, without writing a comment, just to test if you can see if I’ve liked your posts.

        Else I will strongly recommend to contact DebbySEO; she’s a very kind being & will do whatever she can to help you out. Her fee is not that expensive either. Without her help, I couldn’t have had energy to migrate my site n deal with all the different issues. I was losing my sleep as well.

        You’re more than welcome to email me at navin.manik@gmail.com if you wish to check / test / ask anything in person; instead of writing the long msgs here. Your choice 😉

        Sending lots of love to you, dear G ❤️

    1. Thank you so much my dearest Kritika, You are such a sweetheart. I am so grateful to you for your kind words.
      Love and hugs
      xoxo

  5. So lovely, Gabriela. Felt to me like snippets of relationships I had long ago….bittersweet…..and did I mention lovely? Sigh. Thank You! ❤️❤️❤️

    1. Thank you so much for your comment Katy and thank you for sharing. I am glad you found the piece lovely. Bittersweet… yes, it is bittersweet.
      Tell you what? What about me sending you a gorgeous rose and a kiss? I hope they get to you before you go to bed.
      Love
      Gabriela

      1. My pleasure! And….AWWW! Thank You, Lovely Gabriela!!! Received!!! You just gifted a HUGE smile as well!!! ❤️❤️❤️

      2. I am so glad you got the smile too. 😊❤️😊❤️😊❤️

  6. Gods. I’m spellbound and speechless. This was so gorgeous.

    “Every evening at 6 pm the chords of your guitar used to grow rose buds.
    Sheer sunsets imprinted on our bodies.” How do you do this?! Such vivid imagery and just SO beautiful!!!!!!!!♥️♥️

    “How interesting. Strangers are always destined to replace.”
    This. 💕💕

    “By the little colored stall where ice cream was sold in the summer your guitar shed its notes: rose petals in the remnants of a cold wind.”
    You are a gem. A true gift to the world of writing❣❣❣🌺🌺

    Sending plenty of love, hugs, flowers and blessings💕💕❣
    Ishita💗

    1. My dearest Ishita,
      Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your magnificent comment. It really touched my heart. I am so grateful to you.
      Sweetheart, you are the only one who noticed the phrase “Strangers are always destined to replace.” Somebody said that I omitted a word and it was supposed to be strangers are destined to be replaced. I did not omit any word. In semiotic the stranger is the person who is destined to replace (others). All great mythologies of the world have stories in which a stranger comes in and takes someone else’s place hence the meaning attributed to strangers. Thank you so much for bringing attention to that sentence.
      Ishita can you please send me an email where I can contact you. I want to invite you to be a guest on my blog.
      Love
      G.

      1. My dearest Gabriela,
        It is my utmost pleasure. You are an amazing writer. And I really loved that sentence. It really is very beautiful, and so true. It couldn’t have escaped my notice at all. It struck out to me while I was reading. And I read it again. And again. Really so beautiful.
        Gabriela, you have made me happy beyond words. Honestly, I kept staring for a while at what you have written. Be a guest on your blog? I’m truly honoured my friend. And so touched. I can’t express my gratitude. You are a jewel. Thank you for all the kindness and support you shower on me dear💕
        guptaishita15@gmail.com
        Love
        Ishita♥️

      2. My dearest Ishita. Thank you so much for accepting my invitation and thank you again for your wonderful words. I will get back to you soon.
        Love and hugs
        G.
        G.

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