Love in Venice #short prose #flash fiction

“Would you like to remain in Venice forever?”

I bite my lips.

“Oh, no, but I would love to live here for an entire winter.”

“And what would you do?”

“Every night I will walk in Piazza San Marco, at that moment when the silence becomes so permeable that my steps can be heard from the moon. In the heated, mysterious, thrilling nights of the carnival I will change mask after mask, dress after dress, smile after smile, pain after pain, lover after lover. Every morning I will mix essences of perfumes, seeking for the very one that can revive the mystique of my body, intoxicate my soul, empower my mind. Every twilight I will dive in the coolness of the Adriatic Sea; my body shivering, my soul revived; my memory of him forever gone. In the night I will go to consult astrologer after astrologer in the less known quarters of the city.”

I stop.

The sound of a church bell tears apart the moist air.

He looks at me: blue eyes, dark hair; powerful voice.

“Tonight there is party at the Doge’s Palace. Would you like to come with me?”

“I am not going to parties anymore.”

“Why not?”

“I died long time ago, by mistake. Now I am just a Venetian mask.”

For a moment he looks flabbergasted.
….

excerpt from the manuscript Glass Lovers 
@short-prose-fiction (Gabriela M)

image: Mohammadreza Zeidabadi; Shutterstock; [link]

 

87 thoughts on “Love in Venice #short prose #flash fiction

  1. In this modern age, your poetry has a touch of Ancient cities, monuments, love stories of that time and the simplicity of life when things were not so complicated through urbanisation. I transport to an another world, your work is a magical time machine. Always happy to read and learn from you 😊👌

     
    1. I am really humbled by your comment, sweetheart. Your beautiful words made my day. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
      xoxo

       
  2. Good morning G,
    Hope you are well.
    It has been so long since I read an excerpt from Glass Lovers. This was wonderful. To experience her thoughts of walking on the Piazza and the carnivel. This was sweet, enticing, drawing us deep into your characters (who went unname in this piece). I am guessing these are Clara’s thoughts.

    Either way. You make characters and words live and breathe.
    Bravo.

     
    1. Good morning, Drew. I hope it’s a good morning even if you can’t have coffee. Thank you for reading and for the praise. I am thrilled you liked the piece. Are you going to post tonight?

       
      1. It is a good coffee-less morning. Sun is out.
        Will be about 87 today. A day fully of promise. Glass of water and a grapefruit are the new start the day routine. (Just not the same G. Just not the same).

        I have a crude poem attempt at a poem ready for tomorrow Valentine’s Day. Cringe. Thanks for asking.

         
      2. I know it’s hard Drew. I am really sorry.
        “I have a crude poem attempt at a poem ready for tomorrow Valentine’s Day. ” That’s good. Can’t wait to read it. Stop cringing. Be happy. Everything is going to be ok.
        Sun is out. Enjoy. You still swimming?

         
      3. Visiting the pool, but no serious swimming.
        Waiting on the doctor’s green light to resume exercising. He is being cautious. But I do expect things to resume to normal after I get my results on Monday. Fingers crossed.

        You appear to getting far with Glass Lovers.
        Ahead of schedule? You once told me 3 years.
        I hope it is sooner.

        Bless you for the encouraging words.

         
      4. I am keeping my fingers crossed, Drew. Please keep me updated.
        I am not far at all. I told you three years, I know. Now I am thinking ten years. I rust that you are still going to read me in ten years 😉
        Have a wonderful day, the sun, the palm trees, and no alligators 🙂

         
  3. A well-chosen excerpt. It immediately drew me into the story and left me desperate for more. I have travelled the canals and cobblestones of this wonderful city, and your writing took me back to some heady days of my youth. Thank you for blowing the dust off of some fond memories! Hope you day is a blessing!

     
    1. You are really sweet, Brad. Thank you very much.
      “Thank you for blowing the dust off of some fond memories! ” My pleasure. Always. I am making desperate efforts to blow the dust from mine.
      Thank you so much for the blessings too. As I told you I need them.
      May your every minute be beautiful.
      G.

       
    1. Awww… thank you so much. I am trying my best. You are definitely too kind. Thank you from the bottom of my heart
      ❤️❤️❤️

       
  4. Hello Gabriela, and good morning to you! That is a wonderful excerpt! Loved the flow of the thoughts and the symbolism of the mask. You are a great writer, a true artist, my friend. I find such mystery in your prose and such music in your poetry…I am truly amazed! Hope your day in America is as lovely as our day here in Europe has been and still is as we reach sunset, or the beginning of sunset, on a mild afternoon, reminiscent of Spring and waiting to see if Summer really can come too soon!
    Abrazos de Valencia,
    Francisco

     
    1. Hola Francisco,
      Thank you so much for your beautiful words. I’ll try to have a good day. I need to leave home soon.
      “Hope your day in America is as lovely as our day here in Europe has been and still is as we reach sunset, or the beginning of sunset, on a mild afternoon, reminiscent of Spring and waiting to see if Summer really can come too soon!”
      Thank you from the bottom of my heart. I was worried after reading your most recent poem. but aren’t you a great artist and a great magician at the same time? Your poem ripped into my soul and then you’re covering me with beautiful wishes.
      I guess I am doing just fine 😉

      Well, well, well, use your magic and your art to charm the entire world. May all the sunsets in Valencia be magical. May you shine, Francisco.
      Abrazos
      Gabriela

       
      1. At the end of the day I truly hope you felt some of that magic, Gabriela…and I hope the evening brings you rest, beauty and creativity…magic, yes, I’m thinking it really works and I find it in your poetry and in your prose and in all the lovely things you say. Charming the entire world, not too hard, I think the world is moved by thoughts and words of love, peace and the energy that the enthusiasm for life generates. You are wonderful and a great artist Gabriela, have a lovely evening 💚
        F.

         
  5. Something very incredible about changing smile after smile. I don’t know why. I’m sorry to have been fixated on that because amid the assortments of poetic designs that you mapped out, my mind couldn’t travel. But truly mind blowing. I don’t know what to say.

     
    1. You said a lot, Watt. Thank you for your beautiful comment.
      “Something very incredible about changing smile after smile.” I actually think there is something about that too. It borders insanity or masquerades it, as the case may be.
      Thank you again for your comment. It means a lot, Watt.

       
  6. You deftly captured the wonder and rush of Carnival in this piece, G. What I really love is the way the ending mirrors the reality of the season, at least in this excerpt. The fantasy is ended by the ringing of church bell, just as the Carnival season is ended by lent, and then our narrator has to, in a way, take a mask off by revealing a truth about themselves. Beautiful. I don’t know how that will change when the excerpt is put in the context of the whole manuscript, but I enjoyed it very much here.
    Have a splendid day, G!
    David

     
    1. Hi David.
      Thank you so much for reading and commenting. It makes me happy you think that I “captured the wonder and rush of Carnival.” You are really kind.
      “The fantasy is ended by the ringing of church bell, just as the Carnival season is ended by lent.” David, to be honest, I did not think anybody will catch this one. You did. I do not know about my writings but I surely know you are great.
      “I don’t know how that will change when the excerpt is put in the context of the whole manuscript.” You know this one too. The excerpt will certainly change. You are not only a wonderful writer but you are a great reader too.
      Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the praise and for such an insightful comment.
      Have a lovely evening.
      G.

       
      1. You’re welcome, G! I’m glad to know my little observations hit the mark. “I do not know about my writings but I surely know you are great.” I should be saying that to you, not the other way around. I, and anyone who comes across your work, do know your writings are great.
        Happy Valentine’s Day!
        David

         
      2. Thank you so much, David. I am on my iPhone but I really want to say this: you do not hit the mark only. You taught me what I should do. I have to work more on the bell church moment. I need to make it more powerful.
        Thank you again.
        Happy Valentine’s Day!

         
      3. It is my turn to thank you for letting me know that. I considered myself honored to have had an influence such as that on your work, and am sure you will succeed in making that moment as powerful as it can be.

         
      4. David, please don’t even mention. You’ve been such a great supporter and friend. I am to one that should be very grateful to.
        Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
        Gabriela

         
    1. My dearest Joni,
      Thank you so much for your lovely words. They mean a lot to me. Hon, I am so glad you enjoyed the piece.
      Happy Valentine’s Day to you too. May love be with you forever. You deserve plenty.
      Gabriela

       
    1. Oh, Gina, you captured so much in such a few words. Thank you from the bottom of my heart your beautiful comment.
      May your morning be lovely and your day filled with love, my dear.
      xoxoxo

       
  7. Gabriela. I read this earlier today and I was so speechless. I’ve since read it about ten times, and every time… it takes my words and my breath with the feelings it evokes… You took me to Venice, immersed me there actually, and I followed you into the surreal and darkly beautiful and concealed masquerade… your language, the images, the love and the sadness…. magical. There is nothing I could say or send you that would be enough to capture my response G. I loved this xoxox

     
    1. Ah, my dearest Rachel, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. It’s funny because I just replied to Watt’s comment and I used in my reply the word masquerade. You are so right. Everything is a concealed masquerade. My fabulous Rachel knows me so well.
      “it takes my words and my breath with the feelings it evokes…” Thank you. Rachel, your kindness takes my breath away too. I am deeply grateful for that.

      “There is nothing I could say or send you” Rachel, I already have a list with what you can send me.
      I want (lol):
      1. Flowers – those that you said I can wear in my hair. I can’t remember their name. The niagen must not be working today.
      2. A basket filled with chocolates.
      3. A trip to a country in the Southern Hemisphere where I can meet my lovely friend Rachel. Do you know her? 🙂
      4. And I want to go to bed and sleep for an entire week, or perhaps until prince charming wakes me up. Haha!

      Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Rachel.
      I wish you a beautiful day tomorrow. oh, it’s already tomorrow for you. So may your every minute be beautiful.
      Sending you love and hugs.
      G.

       
      1. 1) they are frangipanis dear friend, yes, they would look beautiful in your hair. Fresh ones, that smell so amazing.
        2) I love baskets nearly as much as I love chocolates. What do you want this time? Pralines?? From Belgium. No less than finest quality for my dear G.
        3). I’m sure flights must be on special? Meet me at the airport
        4) well, perhaps we could ask the man in the suit to come back after all. And if a frog appears, definitely kiss it. You never know 😂. Alternatively, how about a lullaby??
        5) coffee. Just in case number 4 doesn’t work out. Never hurts to have a back up plan
        6) wine – refer to reasons listed in ‘coffee’
        And
        7) happy Valentine’s Day. I don’t really celebrate it, but still (where are the flowers that were meant to show up on my doorstep today??!!).

        Lots of love back to you xoxo

         
      2. 1) I’ll take them. Thank yooooou.
        2) Oh, I love baskets too: baskets filled with flowers, chocolates, fruit, scented salt, fragrant oils. Pralines. Perfect. You are such a gem.
        3) Will you wait till the summer of 2021 (not in the airport) generally speaking?
        4) You are killing me. Seriously. I made up my mind. I don’t want that guy. I’ll take the lullaby.
        “5) coffee. Just in case number 4 doesn’t work out. Never hurts to have a back up plan.” Rachel, I had such a difficult day. I didn’t think I am going to laugh today. You made me laugh. Thank you, hon. Oh, and if the back up plan doesn’t work I need a back up for the back up.
        “6) wine – refer to reasons listed in ‘coffee’” I can’t stop laughing.
        7) Happy Valentine’s Day too. I don’t celebrate it either. I’ve never did. We are on the same page. But still, as you said.

        “where are the flowers that were meant to show up on my doorstep today??!” I sent them to you: wrapped in love and plenty of gratefulness for our friendship. I truly hope they get there.
        Thank you for being you, Rachel. I mean it.
        G.

         
      3. 1) Easy, done. On their way from Bali
        2) also easy, and done
        3) absolutely
        4) are you sure??? I knew you should not have bought the suit
        5 and 6). I made you laugh ? I’m fulfilled
        7) I’ve always known we are on the sand page and I just got those flowers.

        just laughed my way through this G, you really are the best
        ♥️💕💝🌺🌞🌏💫

         
    1. Haha. Thank you for asking Shantanu. Now it’s schedule to come out in 10 years. Seriously I have so much work to do that I will not be able to finish the novel too soon. My consolation is that I have a poetry book coming out in April or May . It depends on the publisher. But I have it under contract so it will be out soon . I hope you are well my friend.

       
      1. I really don’t know when I will finish the novel but the poetry book will be out soon.
        You ok, Shantanu?

         

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