perhaps I was bewitched by the North Star
or by a ballad as dateless as my blood
geography of feelings populates unwanted interludes
my eyes, the nests of dewy grass and leaves
emerald eyelashes flaunt
black taffeta chirps between my fingers like piano keys
inside my soul your kisses soar
soft lilac tones like prayers of the youngest nun
perhaps because I read your poetry last night
and cut my soul between a stanza and a strife
perhaps a child played with a kite
a kingdom for a sup
maybe it was the wind
that woke me up
Published in the Indian Periodical, March 3, 2019
@short-prose-fiction
image: Irina Alexandrovna, Shutterstock; [link]
Love this one.. excellent writing
Thank you so much 😊
Beautiful ♥️
Thank you so much, Sarika.🌸
My pleasure dear 🌺
You have created lovely images!
Aw..thank you so much, my dear 🌻
A pleasure!
💕🤗🌸
This is very beautiful! Love it! ❤️
Thank for your kindness Michael. I am glad you enjoyed it.
My pleasure 😍
🙂
This is very really unique helpful information. keep it up. Thank you so much
My pleasure and thank you for your comment.
Felt every word. Beautiful G.
Aw.. thank you, Ash.
Have a beautiful day.
Same to you!!
🙂
“maybe it was the wind that woke me up”
Or maybe it was the North Star, or maybe it was your poetry G, as it is, truly bewitching. Xoxo
Thank you so much, my dearest R. Sending you lots of love and hugs.
Received, gratefully xoxo
❤️🤗💕🌸
Such beauty in the images you craft so effortlessly! ❤️
I am so thrilled you liked it sweetheart.
Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your kind words.
Always my absolute pleasure, dearest!
xoxo
Very dream-like. Beautiful, Gab.
Those beautiful words coming from you, Bojana means a lot, You know it.
I do. Hugs back.
🙂
Awesome
My most sincere thanks. I am delighted you liked it.
Brilliantly penned 💜🌸
Aw Jen, thank you from the bottom of my heart
xoxo
My pleasure, from mine 💜
❤️🤗💕
❤xo
Beautiful! A “geography of feelings” indeed!
Hey there Daniela. Thank you so much. I am thrilled you think it is beautiful.
Excellent 😎 … Thank You!
Thank you 🙏
Beautiful, G. I love rereading your work and noticing new things. The use of rhymed couplet at the end with “sup” and “up” not only gives the poem a ‘sonnet’ vibe that fits the subject matter well, and goes along way towards putting a clear conclusion on the poem to make it feel rounded, and it isn’t jarring because there are slant rhymes throughout (leaves/keys, night/strife/kite), but not enough that the rhyme overruns the poem and becomes distracting. Very well executed.
David, thank you so much for rereading and for your wonderful analysis. You know it means a lot to me. One thing I am happy with here is that the rhymes do not overrun the poem. I have to give up all rhymes. I am aware of that. Yet it’s harder to create an internal music in a poem without any rhyme. Not impossible at all. It just requires a lot of practice.
Thank you again for the praise.
Have a great weekend.
G.
You’re very welcome. I know, and you know the feeling is mutual. I agree it certianly is hard to create that sense of music without rhyme, at least I myself would have to study long and practice a few times before I felt I could make a start at such a thing. Still, I don’t think a little rhyme here and there hurts.
Thank you for saying that 🙂 It makes me feel better.
You’re welcome. Hope you have a splendid weekend.
Thank you so much. Trying to work as hard as I can. It is that time of year 🙂
It’s a dream!
Oh, my dear … thank you so much 💕🌸
Beautiful — kind of misty ☺️
🙂
… ‘cut my soul between a stanza and a strife’ … every time you write, Gabriela – every single time.
Thank you.. every time you comment- every single time 🙂
May you have a beautiful weekend, Eric!
Beautiful imagery and a lovely languid feel. <3
Thank you so much for your beautiful comment 🤗💕🌸
Truly beautiful.
Thank you, Nico
🙂
Nice.
Thank you.
YOU are very graciously welcome.
this is excellent! i’ve nominated you for a Sunshine Blogger Award! You can check out the post here: https://loverrpoet.home.blog/2019/09/19/the-sunshine-blogger-award/
Thank you so much, dear.
Beautifully written!❤
Thank you 🙏
Perhaps!!!
🙂
This is going on my list of favorites. It has such a gauzy, dreamy tone that expresses loss in a romantic, gentle way.
Thank you so much, my dearest. Your kind praise made my day.
Most lovely poem and congratulation for publishing,dear G!!
You are so sweet to me today. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
xoxo
Most welcome,dear!!
❤️🌸💕🌻
Smiling here. A wonderful piece of writing taking us through a narrator’s internal thoughts. The smooth flow added a lyrical quality to the poem and even her uncertainty.
For me, this had a unique tone, much different from your other writing, but so creative, fresh, and wonderful. Such a pleasure to read this.
“creative, fresh, and wonderful” thank you for these wonderful words.
“For me, this had a unique tone, much different from your other writing” I agree. It is different. The other me 🙂 Kidding.
Have a beautiful evening. Must be late there.
Oh God excellent. Wow.
Thank you kindly.
Wow Beautiful❤❤❤❤
Thank you so much 🙏🌸🌹
Pleasure
You’ve literally penned so beautifully❤️
I also write poetries on my blog.
Would love to see your comments over there💐
Thank you so much. I will as soon as I can.
Beautiful poem, beautiful imagery. Thank you for this!
My most sincere thanks, Natasha.
Beautiful words. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you kindly.
beautiful poem it is 😊
My most sincere thanks.
my pleasure 😊
🙂
Very beautifully written! I love the picture too!
My most sincere thanks, Tom. I am delighted you enjoyed it.
Such a charming read!
Thank you so much, dear.
Beautiful!
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
So so beautiful ❤️
My most sincere thanks, dear.
Perfect 100 comments, didn’t want to ruin the number but I felt a pull, and here I am, the hundred-and-first person to tell you: WOW.
AW… I am humbled and delighted by your words. Thank you very much.