Who’s the God of an empty box? #short prose #flash fiction #poetry

 

I hope you do not expect me to greet you.

I do not greet takers and parasites. The sins of takers – who laugh in the faces of those who give – cannot be expiated.

Oh, you pray God! To whose God do you pray?

Who’s the God of an empty box?

Your actions are similar to those of others. Perhaps too similar.

Don’t confuse your emptiness with the majesty of death.

This August is too hot.

 

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78 thoughts on “Who’s the God of an empty box? #short prose #flash fiction #poetry

  1. You have swept me off a cliff with this one!! My comments have fallen with, but you can hear an echo in tones of praise.

    1. Thank you, Watt. I really appreciate the praise. It means a lot.
      Have a great rest of the day.

  2. This is so beautifully penned, dear G!

    I hope I got the meaning. This resonated with me ”I hope you do not expect me to greet you.
    I do not greet takers and parasites. The sins of takers – who laugh in the faces of those who give – cannot be expiated.”

    1. Winnie, you are showering me with compliments today. I am humbled and grateful to you, sweetheart. You warmed my heart.
      Wishing you a beautiful evening. As beautiful as your soul is.
      Yes, you got the meaning.
      xoxo

      1. Because you are one of my favorite poets and my inspiration. Wishing you a beautiful morning. Thank you for your kind words always. ❤️

    1. Thank you, Matt. “I can’t help but feel someone really pissed you off ” Wait, this is nothing. You didn’t see anything yet 🙂
      You guys enjoy your day.
      Cheers
      G.

  3. I agree with “this August is too hot”, but I’m trying to figure out if this is part of your novel or not. It contains a lot of anger which surprised me very much. What are you doing to your characters?! 🙂 Wishing you a beautiful Sunday afternoon, love and hugs.

    1. Daniela, thank you so much for reading and commenting. “What are you doing to your characters?! ” I am trying to make them human 🙂
      The novel has various plans that will intersect at a certain point. Only if I find the time to finish.
      Sending you love and hugs. Have a beautiful evening and thank you from the bottom of my heart again!
      xoxo

      1. Well, you have this gift: twisting ideas and words till they incredibly beautiful create the perfect painting. So I don’t have any doubt that your humans will express their deep innate beauty in the end. I wish you the needed time to work on this novel. It’s already fascinating. xoxo

      2. This is high praise, Daniela. Your words and appreciation mean a lot to me. Thank you so much for your kind wishes.
        And yes, this August is too hot.

  4. A feeling I can understand,
    A thought that I fled unnoticed and powerless,
    Today I put myself into thought and discovered a secret to life,
    Thanks to you amazing write!
    Great work!

    1. Aw…Scott. I have no words to thank you. I am really humbled by your comment.
      “A secret to life” your words are gorgeous. Will you share your secret with me? 😊
      Enjoy the rest of the day.

      1. I meant it. You are one of the greatest writers I have seen you on WordPress!
        Well I was not talking about a particular secret, actually, but I just realized I had always seen life the wrong way. And your post made me realised, it was about time I change myself.

      2. Scott, you took my breath away. I don’t know what to say. I thank you once again.
        ” just realized I had always seen life the wrong way” I am making desperate efforts to see life in meaningful ways too. For me it’s a daily job.
        My most sincere thanks again, and again, and again.

    1. Eric, thank you. Your few words say so much.
      I read you on twitter. I still have to read some posts on your blog. I’ll be there as soon as I can.
      Thank you for your support on this one. I mean it.

  5. Hola G,

    Like your poetry, your prose is so pwerfully written. The emotion of the person speaking to this empty (box) soul feels so real. Again, I’ll say your writing is not to be read, it is to be felt and admired.

    Will keep my comment brief since I am on my cell phone.
    Be well my dear friend.

    Have a beautiful evening.

  6. The sins of takers – oh this one line says it all and your narrative just emphasis the depth of that sin. Wonderful G, your talent always leaves me brethless

    1. Gina, your comment means so much to me. I am grateful and humbled by your beautiful words.
      Sending you love and hugs. May your day be magical like your writings.
      xoxo

      1. my pleasure Gabriela, and with your blessings my day promises to be bright and beautiful, thank you

  7. WOW. I love how the heat of August intensified the disdain, frustration and anger. I felt these emotions and the desire to rip off or loosen a layer of clothing after an intense moment. “Who’s the god of an empty box?” Well, there is no adequate come back to that, is there? I LOVE this G, who knew anger could be so eloquent and beautiful?

    When I get to read a novel of yours, nothing will get done, and no-one will see me until I’m finished.

    Yours, and officially in awe xoxo

    1. Ah, I love that you caught that, R. Yes. that was my intent: disdain, frustration and anger all intensified by the heat of August.
      “who knew anger could be so eloquent and beautiful?” Thank you for this, R. Some may find that too intense; ugly perhaps.
      “When I get to read a novel of yours, nothing will get done, and no-one will see me until I’m finished.” Oh, your beautiful soul. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
      Wishing you a splendid evening
      xoxo

    1. Thank you my dear Charlie. I am going to cherish your comment for a long time. 😊

    1. Thank you so much for your comment. It is exactly what you say, A ray of light trying to move away from darkness. How did you read me so well?

    1. I am humbled and delighted by your comment. I an glad to hear that.
      Have a wonderful day.

  8. A fascinating poem full of hidden meanings. I can’t help but seeing the horrors going on in the US right now. “Oh, you pray God! To whose God do you pray?” What a powerful line.

    1. Thank you so much. I am glad you found it fascinated. Fascinated by your interpretation.
      Welcome back.
      I hope everything is well.
      Looking forward to your next posting.
      Hugs.

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