Thoughts [2] #short prose #flash fiction

I would rather worship the silence of empty walls than your barren heart that you hold so dear; that heart that has never learned how to give.

You thrived in mud like a spring flower, yet by dawn you did not bloom. An infernal amalgam of erudition and sexuality eats your soul like worms eat dead plants. You became one of them: a decomposer par excellence.

I seek purification.

Therefore, forever forgotten – I hope – I return and kneel inside “The Wisdom of the Sands.”*

In the distance patheticism licks your self-inflicted wounds.

*reference to Antoine de Saint-Exupery’s  The Wisdom of the Sands
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92 thoughts on “Thoughts [2] #short prose #flash fiction

  1. Good morning G,

    The power of your writing on display here as you effortlessly describe a barren person incapable of compassion or love.

    “An infernal amalgam of erudition and sexuality eats your soul like worms eat dead plants.” Oh my, this is brilliant writing. Perhaps, one of the best lines I have read from you. The stunning visual of this inconsiderate, abhorrent figure provides a description with no mention of his physical traits. Every reader is allowed to imagine the worst.

    I was unfamiliar with The Wisdom of the Sands. Had to research this, thus the delay between my liking this post and my comment. To fully appreciate the “I return and kneel
    inside “The Wisdom of the Sands,” I had to understand the meaning of this grand work by Antoine de Saint-Exupery. Having done my research, I think it was the perfect exclamation point to this piece. After having shared time with an individual such as you described, one would need to turn to spiritual healing.

    This little write would be a great except to introduce a larger piece. Just saying.

     
    1. Good morning Drew,
      I am glad you enjoyed the piece. Oh, your praise and your generosity healed my heart.
      The piece is an excerpts from “Glass Lovers.”
      “The Wisdom of the Sands,” Antoine… what a writer. If my memory serves me right 🙂 his plane was hit and he went down in the waters of the Mediterranean on July 31. The Wisdom of the Sands remained unfinished.

      Anyway, thank again for your beautiful comment.
      Wishing you a magical day, Drew.

       
      1. I guess now I can add mind-reader to your expansive resume. I quickly researched a half dozen websites. In one “I thought’ I saw it was an unfinished work. I was too embarrassed to ask you and I just don’t trust my eyes.

        Ha!!! I guessed it was an excerpt. Little proud of myself. LOL . Confession time, honestly, I mentioned your book in my prayers the other day. Can’t wait to read it.

        Have an inspiring day. May the light of love always bless you.

         
      2. Mentioned my book in your prayers? Drew, I am speechless. I do not know how to thank you, and I do not know what else to say.
        I hope I can finish that book one day.
        Thank you again, Drew.
        Be safe. Be loved.

         
    1. Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Rob.
      Perhaps, on ode.. . Well, sometimes I can write in a critical manner 🙂 Nobody’s perfect 🙂
      Enjoy the rest of your day.
      G.

       
  2. I would rather worship the silence of empty walls than your barren heart that you hold so dear: it reminded me of a favorite song by Vermillion Lies.

    ‘I’d rather spend the night alone in my room
    than spend the night alone next to you’

    I loved this piece!

     
    1. Thank you so much, my dear. It means a lot to me that you liked it. Now I have to google that song 🙂

       
  3. Beautiful words as always, dear G! ”I would rather worship the silence of empty walls than your barren heart that you hold so dear; that heart that has never learned how to give.” I love it! 😊❤️🌹

     
    1. Oh, thank you so much for taking the time to read and for your beautiful comment, sweetheart. Take care of yourself. 🤗❤️💕🌸

       
      1. My pleasure, dear G! I would like to read your beautiful words before I sleep to keep me inspired for later’s writing. 😉💕🌺

         
    1. Sorry, I was talking about the poem that you posted.

      Thank you for your kind words, and again apologies for the confusion. My fault.

       
  4. I didn’t know about The Wisdom of the Sands but this powerful piece of yours intrigued me so that I will look for that book as well. But I can’t wait to read your novel! <3
    This piece, today, shocked my expectations regarding your novel. Which character says this and to whom: "You became one of them: a decomposer par excellence."

     
    1. Hey there my dearest Daniela,
      Thank you so much for reading and for your beautiful comment.
      “The Wisdom of the Sands” is his widely known work “Citadelle.” I have no idea why the title was not simply translated “Citadel.”
      “Which character says this and to whom: “You became one of them: a decomposer par excellence.” The manuscript, which hopefully will be a book one day, has Miriam talking to her former husband. But those characters barely appeared in any of my excerpts.

      Sending you love and hugs and a million of thanks 🙂

       
      1. i see! Thank you for clarifying the picture for me. This excerpt was so out of any of the pictures I envisioned regarding your novel that I had to ask. 🙂 Love and hugs <3 May Inspiration be with you!

         
      1. Thank you so much, Shantanu. You made my evening more beautiful.

         
  5. I continue to be enthralled by the poetic quality of your prose. Even flash fiction such as this feels like a small poem coming from you. “An infernal amalgam of erudition and sexuality eats your soul like worms eat dead plants. You became one of them: a decomposer par excellence.” I get an image of the “you” figure eating their own soul, an image that nicely sums up the self-destructiveness and patheticism (once again I learn a new word from your writing; thank you) of living in and feeding darkness. A very fine piece indeed, G!

     
    1. Hello David,

      I hope you are having a wonderful evening.
      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and for the praise. As always a brilliant critique that humbles me. Oh, I love to have you reading my pieces:)

      ” patheticism (once again I learn a new word from your writing; thank you.” You are welcome. Actually this line makes me smile. After I wrote this little excerpt I asked one of my friends: Do you know what the word patheticism mean? The guy looked at me and said: There is not such word in English. Where did you come up with it? 🙂
      David, remember I am not a native speaker of English. I do think in English. However, sometimes words from other languages interfere with my writings. I find some foreign (:)) words more compelling. Therefore, I said to myself: if the adjective pathetic exists in English there is a good chance that a corresponding noun exists too. I googled and there it was 🙂

      That is my little story.
      Again, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your lovely comment.
      G.

       
      1. You are, as ever welcome. It makes me happy to make you happy. I remember reading that you are not a native speaker in one of your interviews, though you use the language so well I sometimes forget. I can certainly understand finding the words of other languages more compelling; I myself find some other languages to be more deep and expressive. Though I must admit, English does have a nice elasticity and freedom to create new words. Even if patheticism had turned out not to already be a word in English, I would see no barrier to you using it anyway and making it a word. Part of the artistry of language is the ability to expand it, after all.

        You are welcome again, and I hope you enjoy your evening.

         
      2. Dabid, thank you for your quick reply.
        “I myself find some other languages to be more deep and expressive.” That is not what I meant. English is as rich and as beautiful as any other language. It’s my background.
        “English does have a nice elasticity and freedom to create new words” Absolutely, and for that I really love it.
        Yes, your comments always make me happy 🙂

         
  6. Wow, the power and beauty in these lines:
    An infernal amalgam of erudition and sexuality eats your soul like worms eat dead plants. You became one of them: a decomposer par excellence.

    Simply brilliant dear friend. I wish I knew the book wisdom of the sands, as I’m sure I’d find even more depth and meaning of this.

    Simply amazing 🌺🌱🌺

     
    1. Hello my dearest R,
      Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Your appreciation means so much to me. I am thrilled you enjoyed those lines.
      Sending you love, hugs, chocolates, and flowers.
      Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
      xoxo

       
      1. Love, hugs, chocolates, and flowers… well, that definitely covers all the bases. Lucky me! Are you sure that emoji is not a box of chocolates I’ve always thought of it as one! chocolates in a heart shaped box?
        Xoxox 💝💝💝

         
      2. It’s a box of chocolate!!!!! You are right. I was wrong.
        Did you get it?
        I got three of them 🙂
        xoxo

         
      3. I hope they weren’t melted? And what happened to the rest of them I wonder….? Lost in transit… fingers crossed they’ll appear sometime, just when you need them the most.

        I got yours G. I tried not to devour them all at once, and savoured then with my coffee.

        Hope you have a gorgeous weekend dear friend
        Xoxo

         
      4. Oh, I got everything you sent me. Intact. So I am going to have a delightful Sunday.
        Wishing you a wonderful week.
        Love and hugs.

         
  7. This is a very raw piece G. It’s somewhat fierce and brutal. It’s written very well though. I don’t know who or what inspired it, but it definitely showcases a different side to your writing. Being a very emotional person, there are times when I let anger grip me and write. I then feel miserable because I hate lashing out. I’d rather write emotional, lyrical pieces. Having said that, there are times when one just can’t help it. I had a stalker here spreading filth about me, It was extremely difficult to not be direct and confront him head on. I hope your not facing something similar. Take care. As always your brilliance shines through your writing.

    Nitin

     
    1. Thank you so much for your comment, Nitin. It goes straight to my heart.
      “I had a stalker here spreading filth about me.” I am sorry to hear that. There is a blogger who writes poetry sometimes with the express purpose of trashing me. I wasn’t even aware of it. Some kind souls brought that to my attention.
      I do not pay any attention to that blogger. As a rule I do not pay attention to people who trash others.
      That said, this piece expresses my emotions about a total different issue. It’s actually an excerpt from a book that I am trying to finish. I may in 10 years 🙂
      “As always your brilliance shines through your writing.” I am humbled by your words, Nitin. You know how much I admire your writings.
      Take care.
      Gabriela

       
      1. You’re welcome Gabriela. I admire your writing too. it’s lyrical and you say little but convey so much. As far as some of the people here are concerned, I don’t have too much to say except that they need help. This particular blogger who tormented me was also a sexual predator. He enticed young women though he was married. He then wrote to other bloggers telling them not to follow me because I figured his act out. He wrote under a variety of pseudonyms; never revealing his identity and kept deleting his blogs and coming back. He’s probably up to the same mischief again. And here’s the irony: He expresses his indignation towards other predators and stalkers in his blog posts! Anyway, I’m giving him too much attention. I’m so sorry to hear that you had an experience with a deranged person bashing you. It’s tragic honestly. There are times when I lash out at some of these maniacs, but I wonder whether it’s worth it. I’m going to follow your advise and just ignore them. I hope you complete your book. Your prose is mesmerizing. Reminds me a little of Fitzgerald.

        Take care

        Nitin

         
      2. I think I know that blogger. As I said, please do not pay any attention to bloggers like this one. Keep writing. You are too talented to waist your time.
        “Your prose is mesmerizing” So is yours.
        “Fitzgerald.” I am humbled by your words.
        Take care, Nitin.
        I’ll be in touch.

         

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