Did you say you love me? #short-prose #poetry

I breathe in an unfamiliar rhythm.
The sun metamorphoses into a golden liquid.
Glittering rivers inundate the sky; orange veins on a blue skin. 
The water murmurs.
The pendulum of the earth goes astray.
The North Pole disappears.
The icy castle of wisdom and thought melts before my eyes.
The earth becomes a heated humongous ball, carried by Atlas on his mythical shoulder.
Did you say you love me?
Flamenco dancers toss in my dreams.

@short-prose-fiction

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96 thoughts on “Did you say you love me? #short-prose #poetry

  1. Breathtaking!

    The pendulum of the earth goes astray.
    The North Pole disappears.

    Could you have said you lost all sense of time and direction any more movingly?

     
    1. Oh, thank you so much my dear. I am thrilled you enjoy the piece and grateful for your beautiful comment.

       
    1. Thank you so much, Ash. That is sweet.
      Can I do that every Sunday afternoon? 🙂
      Still waiting to hear about your poetry reading.

       
      1. You can do that whenever you like. 😉 It inspires me…..The reading was postponed due to weather, but I am still excited to go. First week in April now.

         
    1. Thank you, my dear friend.
      “Your love is exotic.” So the lucky one says too 🙂 🙂 🙂
      I really appreciate your support Shantanu. It means so much to me.
      Wishing you a wonderful rest of the day. Is today Sunday?

       
    1. Aw.. Thank you so much Valarie! Your wonderful comment warms my heart. most sincere thanks for your appreciation.

       
      1. Always welcome… And thanks to utou for presenting us with such beautiful creations and thanks to you for supporting me….it means a lot.. And have a good and a bright day 💜☺

         
  2. First of all, I liked the title. But then, this mix between physical reality and spiritual, mythical, poetical… An instant, yet a whole. Beautiful poem, G! And yes, the orange veins on a blue skin <3

     
    1. Thank you so much, Daniela. I am grateful for your beautiful comment. An instant, yet a whole. I love this.
      Have a beautiful evening and good luck with your wonderful projects. I’ll be in touch. 🌸

       
  3. Good evening. Hope you have had a wonderful day. Apologies for my lateness, it has been a most trying weekend.

    While reading your poetry, the title lingered in my mind as I tried to make the connection, all the while bewildered by the (catastrophic) images. I guess hearing those particular words from the right person would be Earth shaking and more. No doubt, those are the precise words to melt the icy castle of a rational mind as logical thoughts melt before one’s eyes.

    That is my interpretation of this masterpiece. Definitely a thought provoking piece.

    After a very challenging day, you made this evening so much sweeter. Thank you.

    Have a perfectly inspiring evening with an orange sunset and a waxing gibbous moon.

     
    1. Good evening Drew.
      I am sorry to hear you had a challenging day. I hope things clear up soon. I wish you the best.
      Thank you so much for commenting and for the praising my work. “Masterpiece” I am humbled. It means a lot to me that you took the time to read.
      Very interesting interpretation. All I have to do is to figure out why the images seem to you catastrophic 🙂
      Those orange sunsets and those gibbous moons. I’ll take the orange sunsets. Gibbous moons are not my thing 🙂

      Wishing you the most beautiful week ever,
      G.

       
      1. Why catastrophic? Well, like I said I had a miserable weekend. So when I read the pendulum of the Earth goes astray and the North Pole disappears……my mind thought in literal terms.

        Now, that I am bright eyed and with my refreshed perspective and of positive mind….the North Pole must have disappeared by the beauty and heat of your words.

         
      2. Hello Drew.
        “Why catastrophic? Well, like I said I had a miserable weekend.” I figured that much out. However, I did not want to say it. I thought it wasn’t my place.
        “North Pole must have disappeared by the beauty and heat of your words.” Oh, thank you so much for those beautiful words. What about the beauty and heat of my love (generally speaking ;)) ? Thank you again for your support.

        BTW my morning was really miserable. Is miserableness contagious? lol I am trying to cheer myself up.
        Have a lovely afternoon.

         
      3. Oh, I hope you day gets better. Between you and me, I dread Monday mornings. I wish they removed them from the calendar. Can you do anything about this?

        Have a great afternoon. Hopefully your day improves.

         
    1. Thank you so much my dear. You are always so good to me.
      Whisking you a wonderful evening.
      ❤️❤️❤️

       
    1. Hello, my lovely K. Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I am glad you enjoyed the piece.
      Wishing you the most wonderful Monday ever 🙂

       
  4. Most wonderful and deep meaning of imagination of feelings.amazing use of greek myth of Atlas.beautiful pic of flamenco dancers,the pendulum of earth.Weldon dear G.🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

     
    1. Thank you so much, dear! You are always so good to me. Know that I deeply appreciate that.

       
    1. Thank you so much Eric. I hope everything is well and you have some good news to share 🙂

       
      1. As I said: her loss. Anyway, I am glad she likes what you do. So do I.
        On another note, I am sure you have more words: your Scottish romantic side, or let’s say only romantic… Ready to use that side of you, Eric?

         
      2. I am sure it will. I wouldn’t miss your English story for anything in the world. I can’t wait to read it.
        That aside, no hard Brexit.. for the moment..

         
  5. Oh my touch by this poem this blew me away. Thank you for taking the time to share these poem through these motivational words

    This produced a smile on my tired face after a long day. You’re appreciated.

    You are welcome

    #PATRICKSTORIES
    Peace ✌and Love ❤

     
    1. Thank you so much for taking the time to read. I am delighted by your comment and thrilled I put a smile on your face.

       
      1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

        Such an awesome way of replying someone. Thanks. Again

        Also, I just posted:

        POEM: MARCH 8

        Would love to know your views. Love to see your contributions on it. I’m always excited for your comment. 🙂

        You are welcome

        #PATRICKSTORIES
        Peace ✌and Love ❤

         
      2. It will be my pleasure to read your post as soon as I get home 😊

         

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