before you leave me #poem #poetry

before you leave
do not forget to take with you
our rhymes of love
flip flopping fish on foyers’ marble
the velvety récamier red sofa
on which the two of us inscribed
the decadence of our southern afternoons
the crystal glasses
now obliterated by the taste of the old wine
the plumage of dipper birds
submerged under the waters by our ardent nights
the blue imprints of fingers on the walls
oh, the withered roses?
you can have them
and with them
our entire past

@short-prose-fiction

 

 

94 thoughts on “before you leave me #poem #poetry

  1. Awww.. That’s so beautiful and touching.. Pain, love.. Amazing.. Know what, I just looked for your post in the reader few minutes before and u popped❤️❤️❤️

     
    1. Awww…thank you so much, my dear. I am glad you liked it. Looking for you posts right now ❤️

       
  2. Good Sunday morning. Oh, this was so beautiful. Dude has a lot of packing to do. LOL
    A break-up so expertly and poetically done.

    Sunday mornings are so much sweeter after you post.
    Have a great one G.

     
    1. Good morning, Drew 🙂

      I am thrilled that you enjoyed it. I do hope I make your Sunday mornings sweeter 🙂

      “a lot of parking lot to do” Well, that’s not my problem 🙂

      Enjoy your day! Be happy!

       
      1. LOL
        Hmmm Someone woke up in a playful mood.
        Seems to me you could have cast a spell and made him go away faster? But then, we wouldn’t have this beautiful poem or conversation.

        Have a very warm and beautiful day G.

         
      2. I was busy casting a spell on your morning coffee LOL
        I wanted to make the sugar vanish 🙂 I have no idea if I was successful.
        Thank care, Drew! Thank you for you kind wishes.

         
      3. I am thrilled I was successful.
        Make sure your entire day is dulce 🙂
        Looking forward to reading your next post!

         
    1. Oh, thank you for your beautiful comment, my dear. I am delighted to hear your thoughts on this piece. Enjoy the rest of your day 🙂

       
      1. you too, have a wonderful weekend though it almost at its close for me here, have had a lovely one. your words are lovely thoughts to end my day!

         
      2. That is so sweet of you, Gina! Thank you for the wishes. May you have a fabulous week filled with love.

         
      1. Most welcome,my dear soul.!!what do i say for you because you have most soft n kind hearted friend.🌹🌺🌹🌺🌹🌺🌹😘🌺

         
  3. Mind blowing writing from you , Princess G. You never disappoint!! Your verses are flawless effortless and flow into the reader’s’ heart and mind.

     
    1. Thank you so much, my dearest Y. I am so glad you are here. Your words mean the world to me.
      I miss your poetry Y. But I am going to be patient, my dearest.
      Wishing you lots of love and blessings 💝🌸🌺🤗

       
  4. Another great blend of beauty and pain. The images convey a sense of a sweet, lovely romance, but now they are “obliterated” and “withered.” The context of a break up, with the speaker reviewing these memories as a way to package them up and send them away, adds a distinct undercurrent of remorse which changes the way the images appear in the second reading. The poem has layers. Nicely done, G!

     
    1. Dear David, thank you so much for reading and for taking the time to write such a beautiful and insightful comment. You know so well how to read my poems. Your reference to a second reading reminds me of Derrida. Everything is in the text and the second reading is important indeed. Linguistic strategies help to deconstruct the text. Obliterated, withered as opposed to decadence, velvety, ardent; here is where one can detect remorse or even more than that. Is this poem describing a break up?
      Excellent comment, David.
      Thank you once again!

       
      1. Dear G, you are welcome as ever. Thank you for your flattering description of my comment. Sorry I’m just now replying to your response; my notifications didn’t show it to me until now. I like your point about Derrida. It points out that a writer’s linguistic strategies are deliberate and meant to convey something, something the reader has to actively interpret in order to understand. Thank you again, and you’re welcome again. Hope you’re having a delightful evening.

         
      2. Dear David, thank you so much for your reply. Always looking forward to your wonderful comments.
        Have a fabulous day and thank you again!

         
    1. Hello there, my dear Eric. I see my friend has remained “old England.” Maybe time will change that 🙂
      Could my dear friend tell me what does exactly “writing lark” mean? Remember I live in her Majesty North American Revolting colonies 🙂 My English is not as good as yours.

       
  5. You brought tears to my eyes…..but such strength and beauty in that strong goodbye. Amazing how You painted a whole little movie in so few words and then processed it and moved on. ❤️

     
    1. Oh, tears in your eyes. One of the most beautiful gift that someone who writes poetry can hope for. Thank you from the bottom of my heart! Much love to you!

       

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