landscape #short prose #flash fiction

“We are the children of our landscape; it dictates behaviour and even thought in the measure to which we are responsive to it. I can think of no better identification.”

Lawrence Durrell,  Justine

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Anything can be said about that city, but one can never say that it does not have a distinct identity.

During the humid autumn evenings the city looks like a wounded being, nursing her own lacerations. On the sidewalks the smell of dust overpowers the stench of cigarettes, and alcohol coming from her tiny, obscure pubs.

Clandestine risings to power, luxury cars zipping by, casinos filled with shady characters, rats zig-zagging in the basements of old buildings. Plenty of frustrations running through the city’s blood like thousands of white blood cells through the veins of an infected patient.

A sea of beggars at every street corner: amputated hands, deep lesions, winkled faces painted in the colors of dirt. Pain exposed in plain view, like art objects in museums: the only difference being that pain is free; the entry in most museums is not.

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In that city our story began: a story in which we created and destroyed loves, trusted and betrayed friendships, invented beauty only to eradicate it at the first sign of dawn. We tried to satisfy our egos.  We ended up satisfying the city’s need to devour us.

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Excerpt from the manuscript “Glass Lovers” (draft)

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57 thoughts on “landscape #short prose #flash fiction

  1. Through your brilliant writing and wonderful personification, you brought the city to life; as if it were a living, breathing entity. We were able to absorb the pugnent scents and feel the life pulsating within.

    A truly brillian excerpt. It appears as if this is the opening scene. Am I correct? If it is, it is a wonderful introduction; adeptly setting a tense mood and scene. You have a celever talent to write in haunting tones. There is a sweet melancholy feel about it, all the while there is an pinch of foreboding here. You have a wonderful literary talent.

    Sounds like bestseller is written all over this.

     
    1. Thank you so much, Drew! Your comment… well, more beautiful than my excerpt. I am very grateful to you for taking the time to read, and of course, for your praise.

      “Sounds like bestseller is written all over this.” Aw.. I do not know Drew, you are so sweet!

      This is one of the two introductions 🙂
      Drew, I did not make up my mind yet. I do not know if I should go with two different introductions or two different endings 🙂 Kidding …or not. I may be able to make up my mind by Christmas 🙂

      Thank you again! Looking forward to reading your post on Monday!
      Enjoy your lunch!

       
      1. A little confused here G. Santa is coming to tell you which opening to use. LOL
        Guess you have been a very good girl.

        Have you posted the other introduction?
        Two endings two? Smiling. I can’t write poetry or my manuscripts unless I have the finale set in my mind. I write poetry backwards.

        Thank you. Let me know about that other opening, Very curious what could be more beautiful and mood setting than this. But then again, you write so beautifully you cold compose five beautiful introductions.

         
      2. Good evening, Andrew. I am sorry for my late reply.

        Actually, this is a very good question. I published three novels. None of them in English. However, I dealt with publishers, critics, categorizations, etc.
        This is my first try at the English speaking world (academic articles aside).
        I am talking too much about me. I shouldn’t yet.
        My answer would be “romance.” The term “romance” bothers me a bit. My work has strong philosophical and psychological connotations. Regardless, I think is going to be categorized as “romance” because I am telling a love story.

        Thank you again for your support.

        Christmas comes when you have time 🙂

        Enjoy your evening!

         
      3. Hola G.

        I just sent you my thoughts on the two versions. Santa arrived, but I assure you I don’t look good in red. I hope it helps. Glass Lovers must not have any delays. NONE!

        Have a good weekend. Anxiously, awaiting your next post. Have a great weekend.

         
      4. Hola Andrew,
        Great present! Your thoughts are very helpful. Thank you so much!
        I wrote you back.
        Have a great weekend!

         
      5. Just read it. You are too kind and generous with your compliments.

        From my understanding, today’s writer has to grasp their reader quickly. We don’t have the luxury of slowly building stories like Cervantes, Hugo, or Hemingway. Social media has turned this into an instant gratification world.

        Flattered that you would even want my opinion. Thanks and have a wonderful night.

         
      6. “today’s writer has to grasp their reader quickly” I meant to write that. You are right 🙂
        Know I value your opinion!
        Thank you again!

         
      1. I am humbled by your words. Thank you again.
        May you have a fabulous rest of the day!

         
  2. I love your descriptions , they are so vivid , scenes unfold before my eyes as I read, G. I bow to this creative brain of yours. You are the ultimate master storyteller.

     
    1. Thank you so much for your support and your high praise, my dearest. I do not want to put any pressure on you but your kindness and your generosity keeps me going.
      May love and happiness come your way forever! You are one of the greatest and most talented beings I’ve met.

       
      1. We both deserve to be happy. As you so beautifully wish me, I wish us both all happiness and joy.
        You say such beautiful things , i feel blessed 🌺💖

         
      1. Oh,no, I can’t believe I missed it! I am going to read it right now. If I can get to your site. My blog is acting up.
        My best to you too Eric…It’s sunny outside..

         

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