i can’t win #poetry

i hang flowers in the trees

i grow hands to heal all wounds

at my feet the forest sings

naked love from Saturn’s rings

rains on poppies in the fields

i move forward

and i mix

boiling teas with saps of passion

i coil laurels on your body

I knit kisses on your lips

yet…

fruits are bursting into blood

winds are choked by mounds of pyre

you’re not here

i can’t win

for the rifle will still fire

 

67 thoughts on “i can’t win #poetry

  1. Good morning. The fiction writer in you came out in this captivating piece. You started off dreamy (hanging flowers, growing healing hands, Saturn rings) and in the end presented us with an unexpected twist with the first fruit bursting into blood. Such a pleasure to read the images you paint. Bravo Amiga.

     
    1. Good morning, and thank you very much! Your comments make me happy! They are better then my poetry. Have a fabulous day, amigo!

       
      1. ouch! you are hurting my feelings, and I do not know if I can heal myself 🙂

         
      2. LOL You said my comments are better than your poetry, How could you say something as blasphemous as that?

        I write poetry forgotten seconds after being read. You write masterpieces that inspire and lingers in one’s heart and soul like a spirit who doesn’t know when it is time to separate itself from the dead body it once possessed..

         
      3. Dear Drew, thank you so much! I am so grateful to you. Please read your comment. It;s beautiful! It really is.

         
      4. Thank you Jaya. You are very sweet. But in all honesty, I am a screen writer and novelist. I am only beginning to learn about poetry. I find inspiration in your work, G., and other wonderful poets here in WordPress. This was something that I often debated with Nandita. I would never fool myself and compare myself with any of you. You beautiful ladies write amazing things that inspire.

        Thanks for your lovely words. I do appreciate each and every one of them.

         
      5. Maybe you see yourself as a screenwriter and novelist, but you can deny the fact that you are an amazing poet. And yes, I am eagerly waiting to read your novels. Publish them fast…

         
    1. Hello my dearest Y! Thank you so much for your wonderful compliment! You are always so good to me!

       
      1. Sweet G, you welcome, its a treat for the senses, your poetry. And I must say you seem pretty grounded for someone so talented.

         
      2. My dear, thank you so much! I have no choice. I need to be grounded. I wish…
        it makes me happy that you are reading my work. It’s sunshine for the day. 🙏🌺🌹🌸💐

         
  2. Oh, how utterly charismatic and heartbreaking at the same time. I love how this piece moved… it ebbed like the ocean, well at least for me. Wonderful piece today my friend! 😊❤️

     
    1. Thank you sooo much, my lovely K! Beautiful comment! The wonderful poetess in you!🌷🌹💐🌺

       
  3. My standing ovation to your imagination and creativity, except for those old poetry(Im sure you know of that) and some of the lyrics of the songs that I listen to I have never experienced such lyrical magic.
    Another thing the painting of the beautiful girl of your cover picture, Im in love with her.

     
    1. You are too kind! Thank you! you did not need to say that!
      I was joking!
      I hope everything is well.
      Looking forward to hearing from you when you can.

       
      1. Dear SPF, im not saying this out of my kindness. honestly.
        I’m doing good, and hope you’re doing well too.
        I haven’t forgotten about our thing, Well it might get longer so I think I’ll write you.

         
    1. Thank you so much, Frank! It means a lot to me when you take the time to read my posts. Very grateful to you!
      Enjoy your evening!

       
  4. The rituals that we use to embed meaning into our losses still don’t salve the loss, we can’t win, we still lose, but the remembrance and meaning that comes from “coiling laurels on the body” and “boiling tears” perhaps lets us go on, call it a draw, even if we can’t win.

     
    1. Thank you kindly for your wonderful words! That’s a great approach.
      Yes, let’s call it a draw! 💐

       

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