i will fight #poetry

look for me i’m in the ships that sink

into the waters of the blue Aegean Sea

i’ll be right there when grim bodies wash

at night on its etiolated shores

i’m hidden in the forests which are cut

into the dirt that’s always left behind

child brides are crying terrified

their skin is showing purple marks

a Stradivarius which was never made

plays the tunes of your own mind

the boarding passes that brought us together

are now long gone, the room was cleaned

and if you think that all i am is cloying love

i’m telling you to think again

for tomorrow I will raise my spade

and i will fight

 

49 thoughts on “i will fight #poetry

  1. The spectrum of topics you weave (coherently) through a single piece amazes me. Your words are warriors themselves, each one baring arms to fight for those solidified thoughts that have risen from those moments of lucidity. Write on!

     
    1. Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment. It’s a pleasure to have you reading my work! 🙂

       
      1. My dear G, I thank you very much for the clarification. A truly superb word for reflecting the essence of these shores. Just a really perfect poem, and as an emotion and as a precision of images and words!

         
    1. I’m very sorry, but I’ll ask. Elated “in the context of the poem I understand, as a lack of light for the shores?
      Maybe it does have another meaning as a reference?

       
      1. My dear B, the word that I used is “etiolated” not elated. And yes etiolated means “pale and drawn out due to a lack of light.” Thank you for your question. The poem that you published today is stunning!

         
  2. I have to applaud the word choice in this piece. I actually had to look up “etiolated,” “Stradivarius,” and “cloying,” but when I did the definitions fit with the theme perfectly and nicely added to depth. “Cloying” was an especially good choice, with its definition of “sickeningly sweet; disgustingly sentimental.” With that word the speaker not only refuses to be romanticized themselves, but directly calls out romanticism as a concept. It’s an aggressive word for an aggressive poem, and a great example of how a single word can hold a lot of meaning. Excellent choice

     
    1. David, thank you so much for your generous comment. I hope you know how much I value your opinion. “Etiolated” is a word that I had to look up too when I first read Lawrence Durrell’ “The Alexandria Quartet.” Durell is still considered the greatest stylist of the English language. Well, the book may be shocking for “our puritan mind” (I hate generalizations, but I trust you know what I mean). Yet is still viewed by some as the best novel of the 20th century. If you are interested here is the link https://www.amazon.com/Alexandria-Quartet-Lawrence-Durrell/dp/0571283934

      Thank you again for your thoughtful comment. Wishing you a fabulous day
      G

       
      1. G (if I may), you’re very welcome! You’re quite generous in your responses as well. Thank you, and I likewise value your opinion. I think I will check out Durrell’s work; I’m sure seeing the style of the language will make it worth the shock of the subject matter (and having looked up a brief description, I’m sure I do know what you mean). Thank you for the link.

        Wishing you a fabulous day in return,
        David

         
      2. Thank you, David. I hope you do not mind that I sent you that link. The way Durrell uses the English language stuns me. I wanted to share that with you 🙂 And yes, you may 🙂

         
  3. A woman willing to bear arms and fight. Another beautiful work of art. You truly are a wonderful writer with a delicious creativity not found in many poets. (Loved the image you selected too).

     
    1. Drew, thank you so much for appreciating my work, and taking the time to read and comment. I am humbled by your words: “a wonderful writer.” Those words means a lot to me. Thank you to a wonderful writer 🙂

       
  4. I love your first picture and your poem has such flow and also a toughness and sureness about it. That love will fight despite what it’s called, despite death and pain, that it battles on. I considered if you were talking in general or if the narrator was like her picture a goddess such as Venus or Aphrodite, fighting for their virtues and for love to remain. Wonderful!

     
    1. Aw.. thank you so much for your comment. I really appreciate it. I did think of featuring a picture of Aphrodite. I am really thrilled that you see it that way.

       
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  6. “i’m hidden in the forests which are cut
    into the dirt that’s always left behind”

    This poem made my day. Your writing style is so beautiful and I look forward to more! <3

     
  7. Hey SPF, How do you do this, I am a fan of your imagination and the way you put it in one beautiful piece.
    I also wanted to tell you that I THINK Im done with my piece.

     
    1. Thank you so much for your kind words, and your work my friend. I am so grateful to you. Can you try to email it to me ? poetryandprose18@gmail.com

      It may work, If not let me know how you want to proceed, Thank you again.

       
      1. I love it! Thank you so much. How do you want to proceed with it?

         

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